I like this version better :). They were both good but this one gets the reader going a little bit more.

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I liked this, longer version much better. It was a good idea to keep the first version up. That one was good, but, like you said, WAY too short. This is a good length. And I love James' description of Lily. It was perfect!

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heya.

yeh i liked the 2nd one better.

:) cute. xx

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Personally, I like the unrevised version better. Arguments are not my favorite thing, and I enjoy avoiding them whenever possible. But, great job to you on both of them. Thank you, also, for writing this story, for putting your words out there, The Sockpuppet.

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corneir than the first i see no humor, just fluff

Author's Response: true, very true

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they're both good
i like the second version better though
i'd leave both up if i were u

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Aww, that was just as sweet as the other one! I think I prefer the revised version. That is because it seems more realistic to me, but I love how you really get Lily's side from this one. Maybe you should revise (again), and add in more Lily into the second one, and kind of put them both together. Nonetheless, IT WAS BRILLIANT!!

AshHa

Author's Response: awww thanx! i luv Lily's Secret! true, maybe i will revise! good idea! thanx



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I guess I went backward, I read this one first. I like it, though, good job!! I'll read the other and tell you which I prefer.

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I like the second version better than the first. there's more detail and it sounds more like the characters JKR created. cookies to you!

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hey!
Not a bad one-shot,I can't see Lily just giving into James like that, it went too quick and then spilling what she really felt about him, she hated him and would cause a lot of work from James to get her to spill.
And
I also want to point out that the banner you used has 'Perfect' instead of 'Prefect' on it, you may want to get it changed. =]

Author's Response: thanx
i've decided 2 make it longer, but that may take a while.



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It was super lovely, but, why so short?
- Starving

Author's Response: ya i know
i think the 2nd one's longer though

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Good work, If I were you, I would make it longer.

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This is really nice!!!
I must admit that the beginning is better than the end, but well, nobody's perfect! ;)

Author's Response: i know it got really cheesy but thanx i'm new and it means a lot to me when someone reviews so i'm glad u liked it!

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awww so sweet, it was short but still really good at the same time.

10/10

Author's Response: thanks a lot!!! i'm glad u took the time 2 review!!

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