Aw, this is cute! Short, sweet and to the point, just the way I like it ;)

I love how you bring the audience through the emotions in such a flowing way for such a short piece; often there's the likelihood that it'll be choppy, but you avoided that quite well :)

"looking at the girl unsurely" -- is unsurely a word? Huh, dictionary says it is. I just thought I'd mention that it sounded a bit awkward to me :P

Really great read, thanks for writing it! :)
-Jill

Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to read this! This was one of my first stories and I'm so glad you enjoyed this! ^_^

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This was really good for a one-shot. You seem to be better at those, since they're short stories.

Author's Response: Thank you! I wrote this such a long time ago, so I suppose I'm a bit surprised to read this great review!

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This was adorable. I loved how shocked he was that she was just worried not mad. Very cute. =] I'm glad she wasn't mad at him. It made me smile.

Author's Response: Ah thanks! I will admit, this story could use some editing though...ehe. And your story was just unbelievably good. ;)

Thanks for the wonderful review. I really do appreciate it!

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Aw so sweet! I enjoyed this story a lot. Fantastic job!
10/10

Author's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate it. :D

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