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Review #1, by Harry and Ginny Chapter One

10th May 2009:
aww this is one of the fics i never get tired to read. I like to read this. keep up the good work please.^_^

10/10

Harry and Ginny

Author's Response: thanks for reading && reviewing and i'm glad you like it =]

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Review #2, by Vanity_Fair Chapter One

24th January 2009:
Awwwah I love it! Your James is adorable :D

Gem

Author's Response: thanks so much :] i'm glad i had him in character!! thanks for reading

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Review #3, by marinahill Chapter One

26th October 2008:
i loved the start - you give loads of detail and describe perfectly the thoughts of someone in their last year of school - i'd imagine i'd feel like that if it was my last year. (gosh, that's next year though :|)

Also, how you showed James' thoughts about Harry realistically - i'm sure he'd always be worried about whether or not he is as good as his father, it's a lot to be burdened with.

As for the OC - eveline (love the name :) ) she seems lovely, but i felt she needed i little bit more description about her character, just to fill her out some more.

other than that it was a lovely chapter :) thanks for taking up my challenge!!

- Marina

Author's Response: thanks so much for the challenge! i enjoyed writing a different ship out of my comfort zone. i'm glad you liked the story =D

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Review #4, by Random Writer Chapter One

23rd October 2008:
I'll start out by saying that I like the idea, but I think it could be improved a tad. I think the idea of James falling in love with a girl besides Lily is always a good variety, for there are plenty of those already. In the very beginning, I think you had some good imagery, but the paragraph about his father and expectations were a little much. It sort of distracted from the story line, as opposed to adding too it. The long paragraph was a bit much, and I think you could probably take it out, but still have a good story.



Also, word choice, variation in particular, would be helpful. When you describe the kiss, you use a variety of words that bring the scene in front of my eyes, so that I can see it playing out. But some of the other parts are a bit dry of this detail, and some of it is a little repetitive.



Overall, I did like your story, and you've done a pretty good job. I just happen to be rather picky about this, so I apologize for any criticism I do like it, and you did a great job.

Author's Response: thanks! just a note--it's actually Harry's son...not James I. i mentioned it in my story summary =]

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Review #5, by gocnocturna Chapter One

23rd October 2008:
Aw! I thought it was really cute. I like how some things are said without being directly said. It's good. The beginning was a bit slow, but that's ok. Your expression is really good. I give this a 9/10!!!

Author's Response: awe, thanks a lot! your review made me happy =D

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