You used good imagery. I was able to picture the settin better.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
That was so cute. Love it!Author's Response: Aw thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. :D Report Review
But you said about the wind blowing his hair twice, might want to take one of those out and why did they go to the pitch?
Wouldn't it be quicker to just go to a place where people couldn't see them and take off from there?
It was still cute, I love Lily and James, they were perfect.Author's Response: haha thank you so much! I\\\'m glad you like it! And yeahh, I wrote this a LONG time ago, so i wouldn\\\'t be surprised if i repeated some descriptions and whatnot.
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aww its so cute!!! Keep writing plz...cant wait for the next chapter!!!
-nina CauzovicAuthor's Response: aw thanks! I'm glad you like it! But this is only a small one shot. :( I won't be continuing this. Report Review
I love that you write such happy stories. =] they always make me smile.Author's Response: aw thank you! Reviews make me so happy! lol. :D Report Review
short and sweet. very prettyful. i really liked it.
Dilys :)Author's Response: Thank you! It means a lot! Report Review
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