Abandoned, maybe, but this story is still really good. I like the Cho you portrayed in this story...and it would have been just as fine if you make it a one-shot and called it a day. :P Report Review
*sighs* I really have to stop reading abandoned stories. And then falling in love with them. I just couldn't help it though, and just thought I'd drop a couple of lines to say how much I enjoyed it :)
I know a lot of people don't like Cho, and I'm not a huge fan of her in canon, but I do feel she gets a bit of a raw deal in fanfiction, so it's lovely to see her portrayed like this. Your characteristion of her, from the little we see of her here, seems remarkably canon, and yet she's likeable at the same time. I think you did a really good job with her. The description and emotion in this was just amazing, too, and your dialogue sounded realistic as well. My only criticism is that your formatting was a little weird, but I'll forgive you for it xD Should you ever come back to this story, you might want to look over it, though.
Oh, and that last line! It was just so powerful and so beautiful. Just wonderful.Author's Response: Thank you, darling! :D
Actually, you reviewed my newest fic, Wings on a new account. ^__^
It\'s there that I\'m planning to bring this back to life and turn it into a short story, likely Post-DH or Post-Hogwarts. It\'s one of my \"endless list of things to write\" type story.
I really appreciate the review, since this fic is downright horrible and was written when I had no sense of how to format something. Gah!
Anyways - thanks again!
- Heaven (aka Celestie now :P) Report Review
Wow your intro is amazing!
It really made me feel a lot of pity for cho.
All this time, I thought Cho was just a whiny person, but this story is starting to change my perspective towards her.
You write a lot like this one friend of mine ...
And Erika Toda is awesome *points to poster*
continue continue deariee
we're all waiting for more.
^^Author's Response: Thanks Fay! :)
Yeah, Erika does rock.
I wonder which friend? XD
Also, you better start writing yourself before I hurt you!
- Heaven Report Review
aww. oh my its so lovely. i know you cant say something about death is lovely. but the way you've written it as made me feel all sad for Cho, and i've never read a Cho story before!
so update soon! i really loved it.!
xAuthor's Response: Thank you very much!
Yeah, I'm trying my hardest to make people like and sympathize with Cho, because she's an easy character to hate.
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Hi! I just reviewed down there V as Malia.
but I just wanted to say that your start is amazingly great. I love it. A lot. So I hope you update soon ;]
*10/10Author's Response: Thanks! :)
This story will be paused for a little while though, since I'm having trouble getting any inspiration for it, but thank you for your lovely review! :D Report Review
I love this! It's amazing, you don't get many stories like that :]
*10/10Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review! :) Report Review
Good prologue. It's good so far :)
I have a couple of things to say, I think you should maybe fix the format and make it tidier. In proper paragraphs, so it makes a lot more sense and the time line flows. I think some of the paragraphs can be separated into two because they are describing two different scenes, kind of. Maybe you could also add things to make it flow better. Do you get me? :p
Of course, maybe you intended it to be that way. You should also add more details so we can see the picture better :)
The last bit, maybe you should write 'Cedric' somewhere in the last paragraph. Because in the first paragraph she is speaking to an audience, then suddenly in the last paragraph she speaks to Cedric. Maybe you could add something to make it make sense a bit more.
I hope you don't take this the wrong way. I definitely don't want to be harsh or mean. I quite like this story! It's very good and I look forward to the first chapter :)
As I said, please don't take it the wrong way! Hope you update soon :D
--raynbow toesAuthor's Response: I think I know what you mean. I'll work on editing the paragraphs. :)
Chapter One should be up sometime soon. I hope it's not too confusing, because the Prologue just talks about Cedric's funeral. Chapter One begins in the middle of Cho's fourth year, a bit before the Yule Ball. The novella's going to cover Cho until the Battle of Hogwarts.
Thanks for reviewing! I'll go back and try to edit the Prologue with the changes you suggested sometime this week.
- Heaven Report Review
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