This is epic, hilarious, well pick any word since I'm giving it all to you. The end of this chapter is a total temptation for me, OMG what will happen next. Lol.
Thanks for the update and will wait for the next instalment :D Report Review
Just stared reading this story and I love Naomi! She's so funny, and I love when she thinks to herself. I have a feeling she won't confront Nikki, but it's all up to you. Awesome! Report Review
LOLL, i swear this storyy has me on the ground rolling aorund laughingg!! hilarious :) ...you know, i cant wait to see wah happens... & iwas wondering if naomi-roger or olive-naomi or nikki-roger and its all mumble up for relationships... but UPDATE soon... thxx, its a great storyy Report Review
AH! Davies is a manwhore...and that last line makes me want to punch the smarmy brat in his face. grrr.good chappy though! Report Review
Interesting that you have the main girl character NOT liking the Weasley twins...since most of them usually do. Report Review
Naomi's a riot! I love how she's so off the wall...good stuff. Report Review
Awesome start! I really like that it's quick paced AND flows well. Report Review
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hahahahahha its cute!!! good job babe cant wait for the next chap Report Review
This piece is brilliant! I cannot get enough and I urge you to update soon. I love all of the amazing charactor voice and plot twists espically. Thank you!Author's Response: Hey! :D Thanks a lot, I'm really glad you enjoyed reading it! :) Thanks for the support, and I'll try to get the next chapter out as soon as I can! Thanks for the review :D Report Review
Yay an update. Please update again soon. I really liked this chapter. You could have done a bit more kind of description of the training. It gives the reader a bit more sympathy. It was really good though. Update soon. Thx
xoxoAuthor's Response: Hey :) Haha, I'm glad you liked it. :D Okay, thanks a lot for the feedback :) I'll try to work on my description in the next chapter :D I'm working on it, so I hope I'll get it out soon. Thanks for the review! Report Review
please post a new chapter!Author's Response: Hi! :) I haven't updated in so long I feel horrible. But now that most of my exams are finally over, I can get some time to write. I'll try to update as soon as I can.
Thanks for the review ;D Report Review
Hahaha, loved it. (:
~Sal1705Author's Response: Heyy :D
Haha, I'm glad you liked it! I'll try to update soon, although no ideas have been hitting me lately. Usually they just come, but recently I just ran out of ideas. >_<
I blame school, but well...
I'll try my best, and thanks for the review! :D Report Review
LOL I LIKE THE ENDING OF THIS CHAPTER :)Author's Response: Haha, cliffhangers rock. :D Report Review
Keep going, it's good :)Author's Response: Thanks for the support and the review! I'm glad you're enjoying it! Report Review
and btw, wood doesnt rhyme with food. lol i was like ??Author's Response: Well, it does, if you take it in the adjective sense, meaning 'violently mad' (which was sort of what I was going for to make Naomi's point). The pronunciation would then be 'wÃ¼d' that rhymes with 'fÃ¼d'. (Not sure if they can show the middle character there.)
And it's an eye rhyme. :) Report Review
She's crazy, but awesome crazy :)Author's Response: Haha, and violent. Very violent. xD
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This is a really good chapter. Please Update soo.
xoxoAuthor's Response: Hey! :D I'm really glad you enjoyed the chapter, I tried really hard on this one :D Thanks for the review! Report Review
ahh, how i love your characters :D
oliver's being a meanie head though :/
but, i suppose it's well worth it. he really wants to winAuthor's Response: HELLO :D
All the characters have got a quirk, haven't they? Well, except Naomi, she has PLENTY of quirks. :P
Yeah, Oliver's getting stressed out o_O. It has even affected his ability to tell good jokes, or refrain from telling bad ones. :D
Haha, thanks for the review! Report Review
Haha its hilarious! I love it when Naomi gets violent! (Btw I LOVE that name!)
Update soon! xx
10/10 =]Author's Response: hello!
Really glad you enjoyed the humour aspect! :D Haha, I try my best to make it funny :P. That's why sometimes Naomi might turn out overly-mad... and violent :P
Haha, YESSS, I love that name too :D
Thanks! I'll try my best :D Report Review
Hey, great job.
I think I'm starting to see a pattern here with the fainting.
The pink broom idea was great, too, that was really funny.
You have a line in here that doesn't really make sense -
*Damn didn't hear the a krunk*
Other than that, great job.
Cheers & Good Luck,
RosieAuthor's Response: Hello! :D
Opps! Thanks for pointing that out. I thought I had it fixed already. I'll go take a look at it again. I meant to delete 'the'.
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This was really funny. Possibly funnier than the last one. I really like that she passes out twice in two chapters.
The Montague thing was slightly disturbing, I have to admit. Good thing Davies shows up ; )
I don't think that someone like Naomi would go sixteen years without having a boyfriend. Obviously a lot of people do, but she seems pretty outgoing, and she has plenty of friends (a lot of whom are boys) actually, it seems like there might be a few (or a lot) of boys after her. I don't know...
RosieAuthor's Response: Hello :D
Naomi just didn't came across as the dating type when the idea of creating her popped into my mind. It might seem like it, but I didn't intend for any guy to be after her at this stage of the story. ><
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Forums Rosie here : )
This was really, really funny. I ussually don't go for comedy/romance, but this is very good.
You write Naomi really well, It's really entertaining to listen in on her thoughts, and then think about all the times that you thought the same things. just didn't shout them out loud... ; )
Anyway, Great job
-RosieAuthor's Response: Hello! Thanks for coming by! I'm sorry that I replied to the review so late, though.
I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter and the humour! :D Haha, I love it when I'm writing a chapter and suddenly this crazy idea just pops into my head and I just write it. And then I start wondering where I got my inspiration from o_O Ideas just spring to me, i guess. :P
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Awesome work Kim! :DAuthor's Response: Hey, Karen :D
Haha, thanks for the review :) Report Review
hell no she isnt too crazy. shes just enough. oh god, i am laughing so hard. i have tears rolling down my face!!
God, poor Nikki lol!!!Author's Response: Let the waterworks begin!
Haha, yeah, Nikki can be quite unfortunate to have Naomi as a best friend. xD Although it would be a great practical joke, but... Naomi's evilness makes me like to write her even more. :D
Nah, she isnt too crazy... but I think I am.
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