Good opening chapter. This prologue gives enough information for the reader to know what is happening without giving everything away. It works as a great lead in to your main story. You use imagery well. My main criticism is that you seem to randomly use capital letters in the middle of your sentences sometimes. Report Review
this was a nice prologue - it set the atmosphere effectively and I liked the use of foreshadowing. Be wary of spelling mistakes like 'gaurds' instead of 'guards' A well thought out chapter :) Report Review
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