I love your story, it amazing update soon!Author's Response: Thank you, I shall try. Report Review
Okay, my mistake. I thought that Tom had already gone to work. Sorry.
Now it's getting interesting.
Poor Tom! He's in ffor a rude awakening when he finds out what his wife and child really are. I just hope that their marriage can withstand the shock of it.
RobertAuthor's Response: Well, you shall have to read on. Thank you for the review. Report Review
Harry should know, and understand that James may not have known about Eliana's pregnancy, if she chose not to tell him. Not an uncommon occurence, even in the 1970's.
harry is so over-concerned about people keeping secrets, or not being honest with him, that he fails to take this into consideration. He reacts emotionally, and don't think things through.
And he knews better than that.
RobertAuthor's Response: Yep, but that's him. Thank you for the review I hope you keep reading. Report Review
She shouldn't have left Grace alone, Can Charlotte be that desperate?
Grace has a mental connection to his niece, it would appear. Perhaps it can be used for them to fond each other.
RobertAuthor's Response: No, Tom was still there, just asleep. Grace is pureblood and so she ,ay have a few... talents thanks to her family connections. Thanks for the review. Report Review
Nice little twist, that was.
So it's very possible that Harry knew his sister. But did she know him? That he was her brother, that is?
It's getting better, but your chapters are way too short, IMO.
RobertAuthor's Response: I shall try to make them longer from now on. Thanks for the review again. Report Review
Okay, so she's magical, and she's in hiding, and hiding things from her husband.
Not a good idea, That could ultimatwely wreck her marriage,
Let's see where this goes..
RobertAuthor's Response: Yes, but Tom found her when she had no where and no one so he knows there's something she hasn't told him. Thanks for the review. Report Review
So write some more.
You're off to a good start.
RobertAuthor's Response: I shall. Thank you. Report Review
So far i am enjoying the story a lot i cant wait to see how it progresses i hope your still writing it and haven't stopped already.Author's Response: Nope, I haven't stopped, just have a few exams that tend to eat into my writing time. Thank you for your review. Report Review
It's pretty good! Keep writingAuthor's Response: Thank you, I try my best. Report Review
this story is very interesting. what's going to happen now? will u update soon please?^_^
10/10 all chapters
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: I shall try and update as soon as I can. Thanks for the review. Report Review
I liked the title, Oh! Nice one! I loved this chapter too! I think they get better and better! Onward to the next.
Clair :D 102/10Author's Response: Haha, thank you. I hope I can meet your standards then. Report Review
I liked this one even more! I think it's a really cool story and plot. Very eager to read more! I like Grace and Charlotte a lot! I can't wait to see what happens next! On with the next chapter, yeh?
Clair :D 101/10Author's Response: Thank you so much. I shall keep writing. Report Review
I do like it! More like love it really but you're a very good writer and i thought this chapter was great! Pleas excuse as I go to read the next chapter.
Clair :D 100/10Author's Response: Thank you, I really hope I can carry on well. Report Review
Oo ! keep writing! this is reallly good!Author's Response: I shall, thanks for the review. Report Review
really good! keep it up! i like the idea alot of James having a daughter and Harry being a little brother, VERY interesting!Author's Response: Well, that was the idea. Thank you so much for the review, I'll try to keep it up. Report Review
I have to say, this was one of those stories that got me " OH MY GOSH"ing quite a lot :D
Which is a good thing :P
I can't wait for you to update!
So Update soon. So in less likely to go all mentol Blocko on you :PAuthor's Response: Well I better get writing then. I'm glad that you like it, I will try to keep it good. Thank you so much for the review. Report Review
I love this story update soon!Author's Response: I will try, thank you. Report Review
As for your pre-chapter question, if you need some chapters with the Marauders, to make this story, then by all means. If you want to, you could do small back looking paragraphs inserted into the story. Or if not integral to this fiction you might think about doing a prequel, in which the Marauders and specifically the James and Eliana relationship, are the subject. I really like this story and can't wait till Charlotte and Harry meet.Author's Response: I know, I'm looking forward to it too. I shall try to update soon. Thank you for the review. Report Review
Outstanding. Just discovered this update. I guess she's going to have to let her secret out. Since Charlotte went to find her Grandmother, she'll find out what's been happening in the Wizarding World of England. Me thinks a meeting of siblings is very close. Please, Please, update soon.Author's Response: Will try my best. Thanks for the review. Report Review
I really like your story so far!
I don't normally read the Harry has a sibling ones but I really like this one.
I will be favouriting this one now :)Author's Response: Oo, thank you so much. I know, I don't like the sibling ones when it changes the story but I'm hoping this will work out okay. Thanks for the review. Report Review
I love this story you are doing so goo you have to update soon!Author's Response: Thank you. I shall try and use the holiday more productively in the writing side of things. I hope you keep reading. Report Review
Very intriguing storyline. Can't wait to read more. Your writing continues to improve but there are still errors in some of your uses of word form.Author's Response: I know I'm sorry. I shall try to keep improving. Thank you for the review. Report Review
this is a great chapter..this is turning into a great story...cant wait for the next chapterAuthor's Response: thank you, it may take a while but I'll get there as fast as I can. Report Review
Oh! Is so right. I think having Ginny and Hermione read the letter, will make it easier on Harry. I hope you have a chapter waiting to queue up. I can't wait for the next. Harry meeting his halfsister and niece. What a surprise for the husband. Great story you have in the making.Author's Response: Well, I'll update as soon as I can, nice to know that someone likes it. Thanks for the review. Report Review
More secrets. How like Harry, Charlotte has had to live. I can't wait to read the next. I'm liking it so far.Author's Response: Well, I liked the idea of her having to 'share' to Potter secrecy, so to speak. Thanks for the review. Report Review
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