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Review #1, by emma 3: Ministry

17th January 2010:
i like this story of lily after hogwarts hope you write more

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Review #2, by emma 2: Denial

17th January 2010:
yes i liked your chapter hope there are more

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Review #3, by billz! xx 1: The Assistant

31st August 2009:
wow really good i lrve it!

Author's Response: Thanks :) I am still learning though :P

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Review #4, by Indigo Seas 1: The Assistant

8th October 2008:
Your summary really made me smile, which is why I decided to pop in for a look. I can truthfully say I was pleasantly surprised at what I found! You've got an amazing thing going here, and I just loved the way you described Lily. I could also totally picture what was going on at every moment, which made it much more enjoyable to read. I really, really liked it, and I can't wait 'till you update!
- Indigo

Author's Response: Thank you ^__^ I was starting to think that people hated it, hehe

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Review #5, by shadowkitty22 1: The Assistant

8th October 2008:
Well it looks like I'm your first reviewer and I'd just like to start off by saying story wise you're off to a good start. You might want to invest in a beta though because you do have some spelling, capitalization and punctuation errors. For instance:

"Lily did not want to waist her time"...It should be "waste" instead of "waist" since she is not talking about a body part here.

You don't need to add - before everyone speaks, even when starting new paragraphs. Whenever you have someone finish speaking but you are going on to continue describing how they said it you need to have a comma instead of a period (exceptions are ! and ?)...

Ex: "-“Okay, okay, I’ll rest for a moment.” Ginny said and sat down beside her. "

Should look like:

"Okay, okay, I'll rest for a moment," Ginny said and sat down beside her.

As for capitalization, your main problem here is with titles, such as Mum and Dad. Whenever Lily is talking about her mum and dad they should be capitalized unless she is specifically saying "my mom" or "my dad".

Ex: Lily loved her mum.
Lily walked into the room and saw her mum. "Hey, Mum. Do you know where Dad is?"

Now that I have my technical nitpicking out of the way, I wanted to say that I like so far how you have characterized your characters (if that makes any sense =^_^=). I'm noticing a certain Percy like vibe coming from James so far. Albus seems to be the prankster and Lily just seems to be trying to figure things out. I also like most of the names that you have come up with, particularly Prudence. I know it's an odd name but it was rather refreshing. I do have to admit that I'm not that fond of Bork though. It just doesn't roll off the tongue properly and sounds bizarre.

Well I guess that's all for now.

Emilie
=^_^=

Author's Response: First of all thank you for reviewing.
I noticed some of the mistakes as I read it after it had been validated. And also English is not my first language ^_^ I try my best. But thank you so much for the review and I will consider getting a Beta.

-Motare/Ida


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