Very sad ending, it thought this was going to be a happy ending:(
the story plot was interesting and overall the story was written creatively. :)
-LS Report Review
That's so depressing but good at the same time. Report Review
WOW. That was simply amazing.
You showed their emotions and attidues well, without changing their character. Well done, it takes skill to do that. I really liked how you explained what happened before the night in the broom closet. You explained how they both watched each other, and fantasized about each leading up to their first kiss. And you didnt have much of a cliche here, I was expecting something different and I'm glad you didn't fill that expectation (it wasn't a good one) but you certainly filled all others.
I love how you ended this piece; nobody knew about their little secret except for them, which made Hermione's death even more dramatic for the Reader and Draco. You described the scene, the battle, her current struggle to live, and how she begged for death unknown her past lover was staring at her dying body. You tied this piece togther nicely, and you left no loose ends. You should be extremely proud of your work. I look forward to reading more by you.
~hpf14Author's Response: Wow, thank you for such a critical analysis of my work! I really appreciate that! And I'm glad you enjoyed it so much...I hope you like reading some of my other works as well :)
Thanks again, and hope to see you again soon! Report Review
it is very nice.
so touching/.Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it! :) Report Review
Sad ending, yes, but I didn't like how short it was. It seems like there's something missing. =(
kbavAuthor's Response: Erm, yeah, it could probably have gone farther than it did. *guilty look* I was on a time crunch and felt uninspired. I blame it squarely on that...
thanks for the review! XD Report Review
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