Lovely story. :)
Really cute, & at the end you get a warm fuzzy feeling from it. ˆˆ
I'll be looking forward to your next fanfiction! (If you ever write one, XD). Report Review
Awww. This is really good. You are a good writer and I hope to see more from you soon. I really liked this. It was short and sweet. Good job. Feel free to read anything of mine and comment. I love getting other opinons. This is very good. I really enjoyed it. Report Review
Hi, just thought I'd review this as it doesn't have any.
If this is your first fan-fic it isn't a bad start.
There are a few things to work on though. First is everything
just happens so fast! It's like oh you've just met and now you're married!
Also some of the phrasing and tense use is a bit awkward. Similarly with the dialogue. Hopefully you keep writing. I know reviews help with that because I've just started myself haha.Author's Response: Thanks for the review! i know everything moves too fast, i just had an idea of where it wanted to go and...well but i am thinking of editing it so i will sort that out. I might write more, i don't know, i'm sort of better writing original fics. anyway, thanks for the review, i'll try to change it so it happens more slowly! Report Review
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