its just a bloody brilliant way to explin james' change in attitude to catch lily!
YOU"RE A GENIOUS! OMG THIS IS SO AWSOME!
Im so sentimental i was sobbing for james (didnt help i was already crying b4 i read this)
YOU ROCK!

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I thought this was actually really nice. Sad, but nice. Lily was characterized beautifully, and the idea with the ring was really sweet. Great job!

-Caitlin

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This is so sweet. I wish it was more than a one-shot, because I hate the idea of not knowing, but then again, I guess we DO know what eventually happened. Really, good job on this.

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Quite good, interesting.
but isn't Lily spelt with one L?
you spelt it double L

Author's Response: You're right. Thank you!

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Hey Java Jones!

I really liked the concept of the story. It was something different compared to the other stories.

I absolutely loved the part where James realizes that Lily had kept the ring he'd given her. It was touchy.

Although, you captured the feelings very well and I could understand how bad James was feeling, elaborating on it would add to the "feeling" of the story. I hope you get what I'm talking about.

-limelight1816

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I don't know how you can fix it. It's already so good. My heart was breaking with James's. Everything was beautiful. Maybe you could add something about how the ring would keep him going. 10/10

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it think it flows perfectly already and it was so sad, but so sweet. the banner is extremely nice. i really liked it, so don't change it at all.
Dilys :)

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