6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Ellie One Step at a Time

26th November 2008:
Oh holy hell, this is all so great!
On to the next

Author's Response: HAHA! I think that was my favorite comment by far. Thank you so much!

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Review #2, by Georgia Weasley One Step at a Time

26th October 2008:
So bittersweet, knowing what befalls them. I do think Augusta Longbottom's character was done spot on. She is an overly critical old windbag towards Neville, and I imagine she was a pain in the butt to grow up with for both him and his dad. Well done.

Author's Response: I know exactly what you mean. It's great to write such a sweet moment for them, but at the same time, it's incredibly sad, knowing what happens. Good to hear that Augusta was in character! Thanks again :D

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Review #3, by Moondanser83 One Step at a Time

26th October 2008:
*sniffle*
ok, when she said she wanted to name a boy Neville I nearly started crying :( I absolutly love you're writing.
Up until today I've never read any of the storying about Alice, but this was really good. The other one I found (and loved) is called Alice by accidental_dreamer I suggest you check it out... it's very original!

Once again, great job!

~Moon~

Author's Response: With the naming of Neville, I wanted to really show how important she was to Frank. Plus, that was a bit of my own personality coming out... I've known what I want to name my children for awhile, now.

I will definitely check out that story. I've never read any Frank/Alice before, so it was a real treat to be able to write this. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!


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Review #4, by amieharry_ginny One Step at a Time

26th October 2008:
I dunno why but this made me sad ... maybe it was because i knew something bad would happen to Frank and Alice later or maybe because they were just so cute together. I loved the way you kept Augusta like the way she is and Alice's obsession with Droobles Blowing Gum?! that was the part that made me sad *sniffles* But i think the snow and the timing made their first kiss perfect. Great timing and great detailing. Love the chapter and love your style of writing.

Lots and lots of love,
Amie

Author's Response: It was a very sad story to write, and I know what you mean. It wasn't that the story itself was sad - it was that we know what happens to them. They think they're looking forward to a life of love and happiness, when in reality.

I wanted them to have a very unforgettable first kiss, because they had such a horrible fate. There are worse things than death, and being tortured into insanity is definitely one of them.

I wanted to stay canon with Augusta and the bubble gum. With the gum, I included that largely based on how important it is to Neville later in the story. That part of OOTP broke my heart completely.

Thank you for such a lovely review, as always!


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Review #5, by searching17 One Step at a Time

25th October 2008:
Aw. This was so sad and cute at the same time, because even though we saw how Frank and Alice got together, we know that the horrid things that occur to them not too long afterwards. :[

I really liked this part:
Growing up with a mother like Augusta Longbottom only reinforced Frank Longbottom’s wish to constantly oppose his parents. She was the type of person who was condescending and critical of everything anyone did. Her nit-picking had driven him crazy while growing up, which was why it was such a relief when he met Alice during Auror training.
It was very clever of you to put his mother into this, and knowing Neville's view of his grandmother, everything fits in nicely.

And I LOVED this part:
He loved the way her brown eyes glinted with gold when she was excited, he knew about her long-time obsession with Droobles Blowing Gum, and was aware of the fact that she had always wanted to be an Auror.
Droobles Blowing Gum wrappers are what Neville collected from his mother at St. Mungos! It shows how she still liked them even after what happened to her. I love how you put these little cute details in that no one would normally pick up on. :]

A wonderful one-shot that is now on my favorites. Great job! 10/10.

~Estrella

Author's Response: I agree with you - I wanted to give them a really happy, absolutely lovely first kiss, largely in part of the horrors we know they soon face.

I wanted to stay canon with Augusta, mostly because she is such a prominent figure in Neville's life. I'm glad the little mentions of her worked well :) As for the gum, they were so important to Neville that I wanted to include it. I could picture Neville asking Augusta about her parents, and maybe Augusta even saying something along the lines of, "Her silly habit of chewing Droobles' Blowing gum," and having young Neville connect to his mother on that level. If that makes any sense at all :)

Thank you for another amazing review! It means a lot :)


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Review #6, by hanna's Mom One Step at a Time

3rd October 2008:
This was sad since we know what happened to them in a few years, but you wrote it with so much promise.. Nicely done.

Author's Response: Thank you. I tried to keep it upbeat, and had to keep reminding myself that they don't know what happens to them. It was really heartbreaking to write, but I'm very glad you enjoyed it!!

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