Really interesting perspective on Sirius's running away. Your writing definitely conveyed what he was feeling and the environment that he had been trapped in. Very good. I also have a quick comment about just a little blip in one of your sentences. When Sirius is leaving on the train it says that he was leaving James,Sirius, Peter and magic and I think you meant to say Remus. Other than that, the writing was really great. :)Author's Response: Oops. Corrected that in one of the betaed versions I had, but I obviously forgot to update here. I'm glad you liked the story though. It's always great getting a review, so thanks for that. :) Report Review
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