it's well written, but (being a huge james/lily fan) i'm not crazy about her and sirius getting together...just personal taste, i guess. but i like the way he spends the rest of the night 'drinking too much firewhisky and laughing too loudly'. sounds accurate and convincing :P

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love it keep writing!

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That was sad, James couldn't forgive Lily just yet, Lily loves James but doesn't want to hurt Sirius, but Sirius is hurt anyway. *Sigh* It was a good ending though, you just needed that explanatory sequel as you already know. Nice story. :)
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Okay i was only slightly confused with this chapter, but i think i know what's going on now, so we're all good. I like how James has his own hospital bed in the Hospital wing. :) Good Chapter.
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I liked this chapter, especially James's bathroom scene, and not just because he was taking a bath, he was just really silly and i loved it. Great chapter, i wonder where James has gone off to?
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Ha! Sirius and James have a food fight. I really like how you described Lily running from James pov and having her run past him to Sirius. That was nicely written. Off to chapter two,
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AH! Why so short?? I loved it, absolutely loved it and am so looking forward to the sequel. Please write more soon, you've been developing such a cute little story, and so dramatic, too! Very teen angst, if that makes any sense. Anyway, it's what we all know and love and crave so more soon, por favor!

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Aw, sadness.

good job

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Where was James? That whole part was very confusing.

interesting chapter.

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''Anti-Potter Protection Agency'' That was one of the funniest things I have ever seen! that was great!

Lily was winning?

I am so glad that you included Peter, the conversation at breakfast, all of it, was really funny.

James playing in the bathtub!

Great charicterisation, the interaction is great.

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this is wrong. you should go to a new line after Padfoot!' :
'Oi! Stop ogling Benson and get your arse in gear, Padfoot!’ Sirius grinned and sent the bludger towards a yellow blur in the distance.

good job, even thoug it was short. I never really thought that james would get uncontrollably angry if Sirius and Lily were dating, that he would just be sad.

James calling Sirius ''Pads'' was a bit odd, but over all it was good.

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Really nice writing style, good job!

Look forward to seeing the sequel of sorts. I'll probably have to read that bit about all the pictures of Lily again- I sort of skimmed and as a result, got really confused. xD
Can't wait for an explanation of that (:
~L

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WHY THE HELL IS HIS HAIR 9 FRIKIN FEET LONG? DAMN THTS LONG!
WEERD.

Author's Response: Oh my goodness, I should have elaborated, I'm sure. It's long 'cuz he made it long so he could brush it. Duh! Sorry I have ideas in my head of what's going on that I forget to write down; I need to pay more attention to detail.

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hey its good! the way u write is really cool!!

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