Wow Tahi, just wow! I love it! You did a seriously good job with this so well done! I absolutely adore the way you've developed Pansy's character, truly spectacular! I really love your style of writing in this fic. I thought it was really good because bits of it you had me biting my tongue in frustration and then the next second I'd be doubled over laughing. You've captured the power of obsessive infatuation really well, I just love how Pansy can't seem to get him off her mind and how she's convinced herself she's delusional when she finally meets him again. You have a true gift for writing. And just to say I'm sorry its taken me all these MONTHS to review, I do not know what I have been doing lately but it must have been keeping me busy, because I've been desperate to review this- I fell in love with it when I read it.
Well done Tahi, good job.Author's Response: Haha, thanks-a-lot, Luce. I have this wide grin on my face as I read your review. I'm not really used to having my stories squee-ed like that and when I read your review, it makes me swell like a balloon. I, and this story as well, don't really deserve that much praise, but I'll take it anyway :P
Thanks muchly. Your ROCK, Luce! *tackleglomps* Report Review
Hey there, I'm here from the forums!
While this isn't exactly what I meant by rare pairings (lol) I have to admit that I enjoyed this a lot. It was very funny in the parody-like sense.
Dialogue: It flowed smoothly, and each character's speech was appropriate. Prince Charming said exactly what Prince Charming would say, and Pansy played the part of the flustered maiden very well. Charming isn't exactly in character--his REAL character, I mean--but I liked the effect of that contrast. When Pansy accidentally pulled off her mask, Prince Charming's reaction was wonderful. It was like all his mystery and allure fell away once he realized who was trying to seduce him, and Prince Charming promptly went back to being a common guy. But I'm getting slightly off-topic...the dialogue was great.
Tense: I like your present-past-present pattern. You pulled off the flashback well by using past tense instead of italics. I didn't notice any places where you used the wrong tense, so well done. Your transitions from tense to tense were also smooth.
The one thing I thought was a little off was the voice of Pansy's thoughts. I understand that this is meant to poke a little fun at her, but she seemed so airheaded and it was unlike her. It was appropriate for the flustered maiden part, though, so maybe you did that on purpose.
Anyway, great job! I'll be expecting my magical potato peeler by owl. =]
~CSGAuthor's Response: Hey!
Okay, so this is a slightly quirky pairing, but blame it on Jessi. Lol. She's the one who gave me this pairing. But I still enjoyed writing it. And I am so glad you enjoyed reading it too. Price Charming was wonderfully easy to write. I mean, he's Charming, after all. lol.
Also, thanks for your compliment about dialogue and tense. First person past tense is still easy but present is kinda weird. lol. So yeah, THANK YOU SO MUCH for your lovely review. I am so thrilled that you liked Masquerade Madness! *squishattacks* Report Review
WOW! This was fantastic; I loved it. And I'm not one for the retarded pairings, either, but you... eh... you really pulled it off. I'm speechless!Author's Response: Omg, yay thanks! Thank you for the wonderful review *huggle attacks Tor* Report Review
I finally read it! Dear, I'm SO sorry it took me so long, but hey, at least my review wasn't eaten by Server Crash Monster the Great. This was so lovely to read, it was just funny and wonderful and fuzzy! I mean, Pansy's narrative seemed spot-on from her. She always appeared sort of...well, crazy. And I liked her interaction with Draco in the beginning. No hard feelings and all that. Oh and I never quite thought that Pansy could be an actually likeable character. I've seen great portrayals of her character and all that, but I never actually liked her, except for this piece. The exchange between Seamus and Pansy was also very nice. They acted just like the people that don't know each other yet, but feel the actual pull. And then when the mask fell...omgshockhorror! But I'm glad that Seamus found her out in the end and it ended the way it did.
All in all, this made me smile a huge lot and it was greatly done. I'm only sad for the poor, dead, burned dog. Aw!
Wonderful job as always Tahi! :)Author's Response: SCM is definitely very bad and very dangerous. I am so glad you read and reviewed "after" it stomped all over HPFF. :D Ooooh, Pansy's narrative seemed spot-on? I was worried about her. So thanks. *ish relieved and happy* And yay, you like her now. *ish proud too* :P
Oh, yeah. The mask falling-off scene was fun to write. It was kinda inspired by A Cinderella Story. lol. Omg, thanks for the wonderful review, Boncard. I feel bad for the dog too but I am happy you liked MM. *hugglesquishattack* Report Review
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