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Review #1, by holly bergman

18th February 2010:

I read the list of characters in this fic and all I could think was 'what the!?!'

Delightfully in character... condescending and snide... very Rita. Cleverly written and original. I like very much. :-)

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Review #2, by smile2006

Beetle

8th October 2008:

I really enjoyed this. The flow was alittle off. It was quite bulky with description at the start and then it flowed into dialogue. Even though in your A/N you do not like theMarauders in general (it pains me that you feel that way :P) you write them quite well.

In my view they would ahve been more cocky with Skeeter, but for the best part, you wrote them very well. I love your characterisation of Rita. It was just like how she was in the books.

This line here

Toss Sirius a wand.

confused me. Was it a thought or speech?

Overall, it was nicely written! :)

Author's Response: thanks for the review!
I know what you mean about the flow; this was written as more of an experimental piece than anything. I really wasn't going to put that first part in at all, but here wasn't really any conclusion as to whether or not Rita succeeded.
Sorry, but i cannot stand the Marauders, and especially how they're generally written. I did try to tone down the cockiness somewhat, yes :D
That was an action; she's tossing Sirius the wand.
thank you!

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