5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by LadyMalfoy10141920 The hogwarts express

15th July 2012:
I like it but the chapters seem mixed up so it's confusing

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Review #2, by AlexavieraJRaven 1ST & 2ND DAY

11th January 2009:
Nice very nice indeed. If you have need of a beta though let me know k?

Anyways I like it so far there are a few spelling errors but otherwise it's good nice and original I like it. Keep writing and can't wait to read more.

my email if you like it is Draco_Hermionesmate and that is over at Yahoo.

take care and continue i wait in anticipation!!!

Alexa

Author's Response: Thank you very much.I know im gonna sound like an idiot but what is a beta???

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Review #3, by hotohori2931 The kill

11th January 2009:
Okay, I never really thought that I would have to do this sort of thing, but your story is oddly similar to the one that I concocted myself, Vengeance. Maybe it's just a bizarre coincidence, but you didn't take my plot, did you? Because I really hate to think that you plagiarized my first chapter and went on from there. It would be a great comfort to me if you did not take the exact lines that are in my Vengeance and put them in your first chapter that is remarkably like mine. It's really fun to think of a story line by yourself!

If I am wrong about this, I am very sorry, but I felt that I should address this issue and bring it straight up to you.

Other than that, I believe that your story severely lacks structure and is in desperate need of a spell check, and it really needs some form of punctuation(like capitalizing 'I's). I don't suggest the sudden changes in character(or the exact lines that I used in my story for that matter) such as what you have in the second and third chapters. Also in the next couple of chapters, the progression of Draco and Hermione becoming friends is much too rushed. It's like you're speeding through the entire thing, and it really takes away from the story.

Author's Response: oh im sorry it sounds like your story but I assure you I havnt takin your plot and I would never intentionally make the story that way if I knew someone else had one that it sounded like.OH and also thank you for the advice.I agree that I rushed into the story too much. And yes I do think I need to fix the spelling because fankly im an awful speller.

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Review #4, by satans daddy The hogwarts express

29th October 2008:
write some more now so i can sothing to rfead and go to anthor wourld to be with yuo in it

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Review #5, by satens daddy The kill

29th October 2008:
this is a good story but needs moer xx in it so get write put your heart in it

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