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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Miss Potter Uniforms

17th August 2009:
I like it so far. Its sounds to be an interesting story

Author's Response: Thx so much for reviewing. Glad that u like it so far :)

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Review #2, by ravenclaw_seaker Harley

20th February 2009:
awesomely awesome ravm

Author's Response: thx awsumly awsum that u reviewed, lol!

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Review #3, by Timechild Uniforms

17th February 2009:
Nice idea. The problem is that there is nowhere near enough detail. The scenarios are happening so fast that it messes up the flow of the story. Get a bit more meat to the chapters so that it packs enough punch to be believable. You have a good story line, you just need to put in more descriptions and reasons for certain reactions. Fer example - Hermione reacts to the change of uniform, what about it prompts the change? Why is she reacting at all surprised given what she had already seen Harley do? Does she still have the earrings and the belly button rings on? Hermione says she looks like a slut, but what does that mean in her mind? Harley said something about going "to work" Where did she go? More importantly, did she get caught? If not, how did she manage to slip passed the prefects?

These are just questions that came to mind when I read this chapter. If you answer these in the chapter, you will find that it will just about double in length and pack quite a bit more punch.

Good effort though

Author's Response: Thx so much its great to get a really detailed review! It helps so i know what i'm doing right and wrong. Thx for putting in the effort to write a detailed review, extremely appreciated :)

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Review #4, by Spicky Enemies meet

22nd January 2009:
yeah, what did she mean by good???
('good, he's a loser, not good enough for you' or 'good, cause then i'll go out with him'?)
go and update... NOW
:-)
xxx

Author's Response: I will update now, and thx 4 reviewing. Its great and helps me no if i'm doing ok, cause i'm new 2 writing :) Ull find out wat she meant by good. Lets just say she has plans ;)


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Review #5, by Spicky Harley

22nd January 2009:
mission impossible...
good start!!!
:-)
xxx

Author's Response: THX! :) The situation gets worse... alot worse

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Review #6, by Rose Weasly Harley

8th October 2008:
Hi RAVM. . . do I have to call u that on here?
Good story, I better get a move on with mine.

Author's Response: Thx! U can call me wateva 'Rose' lol!

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