Hi again! You may or may not remember me from reviewing one of your other stories a week or so ago. Anyway, I had mentioned about checking out your other stories and this one caught my attention. It raises some good points and thoughts. Sometimes, it does seem like we are puppets. This is an impressive piece that is well thought out and well written.

I could see this being a doorway to a longer story. And with Regulus as a main character, I believe it would fit perfectly. There aren't too many stories with him as the main character so you've already got an intro going here. It's sort of like a Prologue.
Perhaps you could add a touch to it to maybe shape it into a novella or even a short story. I can see great potential with a story like this.
Of course I am only throwing out ideas and suggestions. If you are happy with it as it is, then it is still a great piece of writing.

Either way, you really have a way of writing that really can grasp the reader and mess with the mind. I think you're a very interesting writer. I could see you writing stories such as thrillers or even mysteries. Perhaps you already do?

And I must say that I am surprised that you didn't have any reviews on this story. But yay, I get to be first lol.

Anyway, keep writing; you've got some nice stories here. I'll try to read more later. Take care and Happy Writing. :)
-wytchkitty

Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I was extremely worried for this story, it seemed no one liked it and yet, I was fascinated by the things my mind creates.

Anyway, I haven't ever thought about continuing it, but I definitely will. It's something to consider, that's for sure. I'm not exactly sure where'd I'd go with it, but I'll give it some thought.

And thank you so much for all of the compliments!! As a person who only writes when she needs to get something off her chest, it really means a lot that maybe others can appreciate what I have to say.

Thank you again!

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