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Reading Reviews for The Turning Point
  
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Review #1, by pennyardelle The Turning Point

30th October 2009:
Happy Staff Appreciation Day! I thought this was really sweet, especially when James and Lily were talking and he made her feel better. And it was nice of all of the Marauders to start becoming her friends, because it seems like she really needed one!

Author's Response: thank you so much and i'm so sorry about the late reply to your review.

i'm so glad you liked this story! i wanted to write a story showing the change in Lily's attitude but not in a romantic way.

thank you again for the review!


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Review #2, by Meeeeera The Turning Point

17th May 2009:
Aww, that was so cute :).

I really enjoyed this. It was light and didn't move far in terms of plot, but it explored character and relationships, and in my book, that makes for a good story. I know it had to happen quickly, because this is a one-shot, but it didn't happen too quickly. I like that Lily only became friends with Sirius and James - and she didn't fall in love with James after she realised that he was a good listener. I guess what this story pushes is what I've believed for quite a while - if you want practical advice, ask a guy. Seriously, girls sympathise, but most of the time, I don't want sympathy, I want answers. I really related to Lily in that aspect! I liked that they were all full of those philosophies, and they tied into the plot really well.

In your summary you have:

"i know, i know, it sounds so cliched but please read!"

That really doesn't need to be there. It will only turn prospective readers away, and as you've got such a lovely story, that's not what you need. If you need some help, maybe visit the Summary Help thread in the Help Needed section of the forums.

There are also some punctuation issues with capitalisation and the like. Getting a beta to proofread this can fix them ... again, feel free to ask on the forums. I'd be happy to proofread this for you :).

Apart from those little issues, I really enjoyed your story, and I'm looking forward to reading more from you soon!

- Meera :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your nice review!

i definitely agree that when you want answers you go to a guy...and when you want someone to just listen and show sympathy then you go to one of your girls.

thank you for pointing that out about the summary...i'll have to take that out...

yeah i had a beta reader on one of my other stories and then they had to stop and i never really asked anyone else...but if you would be willing to that would be great! i'll have to go find you on the forums and ask!

Again thank you so much and i would love to hear your thoughts on some of my other stories!


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