I like it! Very dark, very soul-searching.Author's Response: So glad you liked it! Thanks so much for reviewing! Report Review
This was an amazing story, I loved how you expanded upon such a minor character, and I especially loved the description and the amazing imagery you created =) xAuthor's Response: Thank you so much!! I'm so glad you liked it :D Report Review
Extremely well-written, I have to give that to you. You were able to use this character that we have barely any information on his actual personality and make such an interesting and intense story.
I hate to say that i saw Dennis killing himself. I love how you only mentioned it instead putting it in an actual scene. That makes it more powerful.
Overall, you have great, yet sad, story. My favorite has to be the end. The comparison between Dudley and Harry was perfect. Good job.
-Reyes91Author's Response: Hello again!
Wow! Thanks so much for the incredible review! This is probably my best one-shot still, so your review makes me feel much better about it :D
Ah yes, poor Dennis :/ I'm an angsty writer so I usually tend to have some depressing stuff in my stories xD I'm so glad you found it good without detail though - thank you! I'm better at writing emotions than actual actions :P
Thank you for yet another wonderful review and the awesome rating! Report Review
Hey Sonny! I know my review is a day late for the Review Exchange. I'm sorry about that, but I've had so much going on lately. I know that isn't much of an excuse, so I apologise for being a bit lazy.
Anyway, I was looking through your authors page and trying to select a fic that looked like my kind of thing, and this one really stood out. The banner mainly, with the people screaming on it. Who doesn't love a good horror? But oh my God, I just noticed there are spiders on the banner. Eww! Aha, they scare me so much. Gah.
I can honestly say this is one of the best fics I've read in ages. It really is, and there are so many reasons why.
I think you've created such an original plot here. There could be any number of reasons why Dudley actually left that cup of tea outside Harry's bedroom, and to think that this could be the reason is just ... amazing.
Dennis is a character you never really read about, and I like how you've done that.
I think your descriptions are absolutely amazing. They really gave me such a clear picture of the scene you were setting and of the people and everything.
One thing I would have liked to read a little more about is how Dennis escaped from The Death Eaters? But apart from that I really like it.
Great work :)Author's Response: Liam! Thanks so much for the incredible review! Serious, it's so awesome of you to make time to review - I completely understand how busy you must be to run such an amazing site, so no worries about the delay - I completely understand and am grateful you even managed to come and review. Thank you Report Review
hey so even before i start reading i would like to advise you to bold the disclaimer and author note it makes it easier to read.
Secondly i love the banner.
Alright i am going to read now, it soundslike you have an interesting idea going for you
alrighty, i've read it now.
So i really liked the character you had dennis be as an OC. it was really good
your story is captivating and hooking and it is sure to draw the reader in and it's a good way to even though this is a oneshot to make they wish that they had more and i think you do that very nicely
i loved your descriptions, they were so vivid and extremely well written. i really thought they were beautiful
i do happen to have some CC for you
i think that you should really work on starting your sentencing with other words you have some incomplete sentences that could easily become one whole sentence instead of two seperate ones
i think it was near the beginning i first spotted them
other than that i think it's great. Good luck for your challenge
and lastly, remember you can only improve as a writerAuthor's Response: Hey! Sorry, I know it's taken me ages to respond :( Thanks so much for coming by to review :D
Disclaimer and author's note - point noted! I'll do that asap ;) Thanks! The banner is courtesy of Wizardora :) Thanks so much - really glad you liked it and I'm sure she'll be happy too!
Aww thank you :D So pleased you liked the description!
Oooh goody - CC :D I'll take a look over it and make changes asap! Thanks for letting me know :)
Thanks so much for stopping by to review - I'm really sorry it's taken me so long to get back to you :(
Thank you! :D Report Review
Definitely off the beaten path of the happy fluffy stories that I normally read but well done. It's a shame that Dudley was too late in doing anything to help his friend because of his own stupid feelings towards Harry because of how his parents raised him.
I really liked the imagery that you created through your description. Especially the pub scene where you talked about the cracked leather seats. It was almost as if I could reach out my hand and touch it myself.
=^_^=Author's Response: Thanks so much :D I'm glad I could offer you something else to read! Yes about Dudley - I was trying to make people aware that not everything in life is perfect! lol Hope it didn't come across as too angsty :S :)
Yay!! So glad that you liked the description!! Thanks so much :D Report Review
Terms of Service
categories & genres
short story collection