I love it it was one of the best cliff hanger I have ever read! Report Review
I hate you. I hate you with all of my heart. I hate you more than -insert cool analogy here-!!! You cant just leave a person hanging like that! That is just cruel! You better make a new story, and fast. Report Review
I love the way you write, its easy to read. I hate it when there is so much un needed words, like the word stuff and like. Report Review
o a twist! And the plot thickens. (dramatic music in the background) Report Review
o. I like how it ended! Report Review
Okay, scince you begged, ill reveiw the chapter. It was Awsome!! Keep writing! Report Review
OH MY GOD!!! that is such a cruel ending! hahaha, oh no! the suspense is killing me! but didnt hermione have sex with tom only a night before draco? so isnt there a chance that it's draco's baby?
oh oh oh! please write more!Author's Response: Your the first one to realize that ;)! Good Job :) Im sorry the suspense is killing you. And i'll honestly update as soon as I can! Keep reading and reviewing Report Review
Oh. MY. GOSH. WHOA! Great chapter! Kind of weird ending! Write another...please, please, please!
But couldn't it be Draco's baby? This is way confusing...please explain in this next book. And are you finished with this book? Because if you are, you should write that.
fredlovesme18 ;)Author's Response: Yes i am done.. and yes it is confusing
all will be explained my dear :) Report Review
This did not make sense all that much either. Harry's dialogue was all messed up...you rushed it all too much. I'm sorry to criticize, but it wasn't that a great a chapter. I mean, it had little tidbits of awesome writing, but I you should really revise it. You left out alot of "quotation marks."
fredlovesme18 ;)Author's Response: Hmm sorry
i might have done that
sometimes i have so many ideas i jsut cant wait to get them down and i leave stuff out :P
but i will make sure to be more careful :)! Report Review
This was a bit of a let down after the other chapter...it was kind of confusing. I'm not sure if I understand. Was Draco faking all along? Or did he just remember everything once Tom walked in? However, there was some great writing going on...you were excellent as a confused Draco. Still, very good despite the lack of clarity.
fredlovesme18 ;)Author's Response: Hmm well he didnt remember everything.. until tom walked in.. and as soon as tom walked in everything kinda clicked into place for Draco, except he continued to pretend that he didnt know who Tom was in order to protect Hermione :) Report Review
Wow. Wow. Oh my gosh, I was NOT expecting that. It was so well written and had moments full of tension and surprise...beautifully done. And the dialogue ran smoothly, which can be one of your weak points. Wow. Why couldn't she just apparate away? How did Tom get trained as a wizard if he didn't go to Hogwarts?
Wow. This was the perfect twist in a perfect story.
Good job! It was amazing! A perfect chapter!
fredlovesme18 ;)Author's Response: Thanks!
ya dialogue isnt the best for me I know ;)
but i got alot to learn so im excited to see how it all works out lol!
and yes i will continue thankyou
and i know it was the perfect twist i rele enjoyed it ;) Report Review
Wow! The writing at the beginning was absolutely amazing! Very descriptive, very professional. However, things kind of went downhill after Hermione explained to Draco...it went by much too quickly so try and work out the dialogue so it isn't so rushed. Watch your "you're" and "your" and your "there," "their," and "they're."
fredlovesme18 ;) 9.5/10! (Would be 10 if you fixed conversations)
P.S. Sorry I haven't reviewed! Expect more soon...and I updated my Dramione if you want to read it...!)Author's Response: Ohhh thankx! i've been waiting for updates just havent checked this website in awhile due to insane writers block!
but i got two betta's so hopefully he AND she can help :P
and i hope u continue reading :)!
I AM SO SORRY! I FEEL AWFUL! I am so sorry, PinkRose, I have not reviewed in ages. This is a wonderful twist in the story, and you did it so nicely! I loved it...probably one of your best chappies. Remember your grammar and punctuation, though! That is the only confusing bit...however, it was a wonderful chapter and I can't wait to read more!
Again, so sorry for not reviewing,
fredlovesme18 ;) 8.5/10Author's Response: Thank-you so much for reviewing ...
I missed reading your reviews! Report Review
I love this story so much. I read it once and have been searching for it for ages, and now I have found it. Yay.
harrylovesginnylovesharry :)Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it :D
Hope you like the rest as well
Thankyou for reading and reviewing! Report Review
please, please continue! i liked it and this chapter was good
wats the next one going to be called?
Veela_is_meAuthor's Response: I honestly dont know.
I make up chapter names when I post the stories. As I'm writing them they are simply Chapter 1: or Chapter 2: etc :D But I'm glad you like it and I hope you like the next part as well! Report Review
yes i would definatley like you to continue! you cannot just end the story with her saying that she is pregnant! that would be mean!! i hope u keep writing!!Author's Response: I WILL! :D
ahah it might take awhile though! Report Review
omg i hate you thats evil. yes continue lol its a good plotAuthor's Response: thankyou ... I'm glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
update soon can't wait for more chapters good workAuthor's Response: Thank-you I'm glad you thought I did well! Report Review
I haven't reviewed before, but I thoroughly enjoyed your first book. This one however, felt a bit more rushed and not as well thought out. It was like you just wanted to post a chapter up as soon as possible, and not thinking through what was happening. This story was okay but it wasn't as well thought out as the first one; not trying to be horrible, but this one seemed like you couldn't be bothered to keep the detail in.
I do hope that in the following "book" that your writing picks up again to how it was in the first book, because, if you put your mind to it, you could be a truly amazing writer.
VickyAuthor's Response: Thankyou I suppose, as a matter of fact I did try very hard with this "book" some of the chapters were rushed a bit, and some of them were left vague on purpose, thats the beauty of writing sometimes things have to be left to the readers imagination, some of those scenes I just couldnt see if people would agree with what I wrote so I decided that I would make them vague and see what happens and it worked for me. But thankyou for reviewing and sharing your opinion and I'll be sure to keep that in mind when I write the next one Report Review
update soon can't wait for moreAuthor's Response: Thank-you I'm glad you enjoyed it and I cant wait to hear what you guys have to say about the rest of the story! Report Review
um. what? y are there 2 of the same chapters? It was good the first time, but I didn't even bother reading it this time.Author's Response: Oh that might have been a amistake XD Report Review
GREAT! loving this! Though it made me a little sad, I'm guessing that, since it's true love, D+H will find each other again. :)Author's Response: thankx lol :D Report Review
I'm so sorry I haven't reviewed! I've been terribly busy, and I haven't been on site for over a month! All your reviews were deleted...so I thought I would leave you one! Well, I promise to review the chapters I haven't read!
fredlovesme18 :)Author's Response: I'm so srry I havent responded...
but I couldnt get on my account!
And now that I can new chapters will be posted immediately because I have actually finished this story!
Thankyou so much for continuing to be ever faithful! Report Review
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