Ooh... that was hot. ^_^ I never dared to write this graphical in femmeslash fictions. LOL Great job! Great description. I hope you write more and update soon.Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review Mitch! I think I got a bit carried away in the description. At the moment, my brain function is like none because it is holidays and I haven't done anything yet. *hugs* Report Review
wow. good job. 10/10! update soon! i hope rose can sort out her feelings cuz it's not fair to mariah or scorpius this way...
-xoxo, rowenaravenclaw94Author's Response: This story is actually abondoned. If you want to read other femmeslah stories, check out Unforgettable. That will be continued to be updated.
I can't write next gen, that is why this story hasn't been update. I'm thinking about getting rid of this chapter and making it a one shot.
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wow. that was hot. good job! 10/10! i don't see why rose is with scorpius if she could be with hannah. they seem good together.
-xoxo, rowenaravenclaw94Author's Response: Do you mean Maria? lol, she's confused.
Thanks for the review.
Honestly it's bealiviable just like Unfaithfull and all the other stories the person you dedicated this to writes.
Actually going though it .
Anyway this has gr8 potencial.Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you think it has potential. Report Review
Hi Amy! I'm happy I've discovered this fic, though I know you requested it for me to review. :) Thank you for the dedication, btw! *loves*
I like the beginning of your story, it starts with a wonderful drama-rama between Rose and her fiancé, Scorpius.
I also can see her inner struggle, that she had always fancied Mariah, and then suddenly the unexpected happened: Mariah was standing in the rain with her and holding her. And in the next moment they were making love with each other. :D
There were just some flaws:
Mariah nodded her hand, as she placed kisses on Rose’s neck. Mariah held tight onto Ginny as she disapparated to her apartment. As soon as they had landed, Mariah started to pull Rose towards the hallway. --Why Ginny? I think you meant Rose... :)
...this time only a couple of metres away, --A couple of metres is still very far away from each other. Maybe write inches or centimetres. :)
I love how you wrote the love scene in the bathroom. It was just weird reading the actions repeatedly: kiss on lips; kiss the breasts' tips, caress inner thighs.
This is what troubles me in my own femmeslash stories, too. But also, I don't know how far I can imagine a lesbian love scene. LOL
I love your story! :D
*added to faves*Author's Response: Thank you so much.
I actually realized those mistakes when I went through it the other day, when I was trying to write chapter three.
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Great and intense story, I enjoyed it greatly...Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review Report Review
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