Again, another unbelievable story. You have this supreme talent that is hard for me to describe. Report Review
That was incredibly powerful. The two, on equal grounds for even the shortest time.
Bravo to you. Report Review
I have never thought about the relationship between James and Snape. I always shuddered at the cruel way James had treated him during that one glimpse we had of Snape's life...and I shunned it out of my mind. It was eye-opening, to say the least.
But I loved it. I absolutely loved it. It's sad, yet so /real/.
I loved James. I thought he was amazing. It was wonderful to see him trying so hard to be kind to Snape. It...cut at me to see him hesitate, wondering if he should try talking to him about the Dark Arts and to try to "save" him, so to speak. It hurt because one wonders...what if he did? And the pain he felt when he had the guilt curse put on him, that showed how wonderful a person he was, and I loved it.
I really can't phrase what I want to about this one-shot.
But I loved it. Report Review
i loved it.
i think you perfectly captured both of their personalities: especially Snape's (:
great job! Report Review
I honestly think that this is one of the best written stories I have read on HPFF since I joined, and it's my first review :) How special do you feel... :D Joke...
But seriously, this story makes me think, it made me laugh, and feel slightly sad at points, and that's how I measure a good story, by what it made me feel, because if I feel something, that means it touched me.
Nice work :) x Report Review
it's really good Report Review
Wow! Awesome! Very powerful! Seems to be exactly as the characters would be if you extended them from the glimpses you get of their younger selves in the books! Absolutly perfect! Report Review
What a brilliant opening to the story. Of course Severus would try to boost his confidence by losing his virginity. That was a remarkably realistic thing to do. And I literally died when her name was Rhonda Vane. Like mother, like daughter, I see. I love your writing, as always. You always do such brilliant, new things like this spell for guilt. That would be a wonderful one to throw on James, and I'm glad to see that he totally succumbed to it.
HAHAHA. Plopper. I love that. That's great. What's so wonderful about the dialogue here is that you can sense the awkward tension even just from reading it. I love it!
Wonderful ending, too. I loved how human your characters truly are. I think one of my favorite moments was when James said, "She judges everyone." It really took away from Lily's usual Mary-Sue persona, and I loved that. Great story! I think this is one of my favorite things I've read from you! :) Report Review
Wow. That was a really amazing one-shot. Brilliant characterisation and interaction. Great ending.
10/10 Report Review
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