I liked this. I mean, it's depressing - like really depressing. But it's also somewhat what I would expect life to turn out for them - possibly anyways. I think it's quite possible that they won't be able to figure out how to settle into a mundane, normal every day life. Especially Harry since he's never really had a family. So I liked this. It depressed me a lot too, but it was truthful. Bitter. Loved this:
- Her words were unsure and low, but it doesn't matter how you say the word "divorce." It still sounds like "destruction."
- The weekly tradition had started as great fun. It made them feel civilized and grown-up. They had all known that they were really still just kids, fresh-faced, and twenty-one.
But now, as their own kids scampered around in the next room, they couldn't pretend anymore; it had gradually become the real thing.
The bitterness and the sense of growing up was just very very fitting and real. The main question that seems to reverberate through the air is "is that all our lives were? Is this it?" I loved that. Good job. Report Review
good story, well written Report Review
I have never really read a lot of after hogwarts types of Fan Fiction with the Trio.
But this one was quite sad actually! They all didn't really like each other anymore. Not the way the used to.
Ginny does laugh.
Harry isn't Happy
Ron and Hermione fight.
Hermione wants a divorce.
It's all really down hill for them all. It's really quite sad actually.
I really liked it though, so good job!!
Hufflepuff Report Review
Actually I sometimes wondered if the 4 would actually end up happy. I always had that nagging voice in my head that reality is not so nice to persons. Harry married Ginny cause he always wanted a family, belong to one. And Ginny is a perfect option. And as much as I love the pairing Ron/Hermione I can't imagine them together after the first hormone-driven months. He is not stupid, but she is to outward with her intelligence. she always throws it in everyone’s face. That is too harsh. And all together did not learn in the books to talk about feelings at all, which you are supposed to learn between 15 and 20 ...
So, as depressive as the story is: I think it is quite realistic! Report Review
I think this is my new favorite piece of writing on this site. This is seriously the most down to earth one-shot that I've ever read before. There was no glamor and perfect family dinners, but there was a lot of real life situations and comments tucked in here.
All too often it seems like the characters are immune to the things that happen with families, like divorce and gaining weight, and dinners that contain some really awkward moments at times. This fic had all those things though, you had the trio grow up to be any other adult with tons of problems. Was it happy? No, but it sure was real.
You managed to keep all of the characters cannon, at least I think so, all while ageing them and making them completely normal. Sure, they were brave once, but that doesn't mean that their going to be brave forever. Eventually they just returned to be normal people with normal people problems.
Amazing piece of work, I cannot believe that it only has fourteen reviews! Report Review
This is such a lovely story, despite it being a little bit of a sad one. I don't like R/Hr or H/G, but considering this fic shows them having difficulties in their relationships, I like it. That's probably mean of me, but nevermind, haha!
The little story Hermione was telling at the beginning is such a typical housewifey thing, haha. My mum and her friends talk like that all the time, and laugh at things that aren't even really that funny and usually at the expense of the people they're married to.
Rose was written beautifully. It was so stunning, her thinking about the divorce and all the stuff about her being good at hiding... it took my breath away. I don't usually like Rose, but I love this version of her character. I can't get over how much I like Rose.
I love the end sentence too. It's so simple and seems like a fairly vague way of ending something, but I really think it works with this.
What I love most of all though is that you actually use parenthesis properly. I've read fics where authors have randomly used them and put authors notes in the middle of a section, but you used them well! YAY! I love you for that :)
10/10 Lorren. Report Review
Wow...this story is reality. I believe you did a wonderful job in showing the world that happily ever afters are not as easy as JKR's epilogue makes them out to be. I appreciate this story also because it reveals that the trio had their shining period of time at Hogwarts, but how are they supposed to act when not fighting evil every second of every day? You're right. They WERE brave, now what? Report Review
Wow.. What an intriguing story :) I honestly think this is one of the most realistic stories I've read. It certainly portrays human nature in a way I've never seen before. It really describes how the glory of the younger years can easily fade, and that what was once the best thing in life suddenly can become the thing that bothers you the most.
Very, very well done :) Report Review
Wow. That was really something. It was so crushingly real. Their lives are really tragic in their own way. I suppose that's what happens when you accomplish your greatest deeds very young.
I liked how Rose was talking herself into being brave while Hermione was talking herself out of it, in a way. Very neatly tied in there.
10/10 Report Review
I got this from the Story Seekers podcast, and they were right. It's absolutely brilliant. It's so poignant, but so harshly realistic at the same time. The subtle switches in point of view were so cleverly done, they really were. I loved this. Report Review
oh my gosh, that was brilliant. just... amazing. Report Review
This was such an excellent piece of writing!!! You convey emotions so well that I could feel how each of them was feeling when it was there turn to speak. You are a fantastic writer!!!
PrincessPadfoot Report Review
Hi, I heard about this on HPPC Story Seekers podcast, and I must say it has just made its way onto my favorites list! It was absolutely genius and very moving. You did a great job of seamlessly transitioning between the inner thoughts of all the characters. I loved the tiny details you put in to show that this was a well-worn family (Grumpshine the Car) and you have given them all such a sense of history together, without really talking about the war at all. Overall, quite impressive! 10/10 Report Review
This was really sad, but very well done. And realistic. I think it reaches out to a lot of people on a very personal level, including myself. I love how you messed with the gender roles btw. Ron and Hermione. Everything from her short haircut to Hermione driving home (rather than Ron) screams that she is emasculating her husband. Trifle details, but it makes a point. Strange how Ron wants to be equals, and she calls him sexist...but has really become one herself, hasn't she? Anyway, I like the details about Ginny looking like Mrs. Weasley. The parenthetical asides were genius, especially the ones about Harry's book. So honest, so real, so good. I'm glad I listened to storyseekers and found this amazing piece. Great Job! 11/10 Report Review
I love this. I heard about it on Story Seekers and checked it out!! It's really good. :) Report Review
Wow, this was quite good. It was very realistic and I hope this isn't the end. I would love to see more of this. You captured the thoughts and feelings immaculately. I could very well see this happening with the characters and I think this is what I love most about it. Report Review
this was quite entrancing. I loved how realistic the situation was, & how the perspective changed-from the begining-great job. Report Review
This is among the finest writings I've come across fanfic or no. You have taken characters that have been tread over so many times and you've made them fresh. The concept is so brilliant and well executed. For an author known mainly for humor you've shown an incredible amount of versatility with this piece and others. Well done! Report Review
It's absolutely beyond me as to why this doesn't have any reviews. It's really incredible - dark and edgy, but very simple. Never have I ever seen the couples in the series portrayed so realistically. It's very Revolutionary Road, doing the mundane just to keep everyone safe and happy, even if you loose yourself in the process. Report Review
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