'stain of chocolate' hah! at first i was like, 'chocolate? why chocolate, that's weird'
How very human: 'but sometimes constructive criticism was a necessary measure'. This is why my closest friends are my closest friends.
'Harry never objected at the wedding of the woman he loved, so for all intents and purposes they were even.' ironic, perfect.
'When Rose Weasley was born, Harry was on a double-shift, covering for Ron. Harry never congratulated the couple on the birth, instead deciding for an easy grin and a fake air of happiness.' extremely picky, but 'fake' seems a little blatant? it may just be me.
'Hermione would never forget that day, the day when they sat on her sofa with chicken salad and pork chops laughed about Kingsley and Ron and everyone in between.' do you mean ' (,) laughing about..."
The ending is more perfect for this story than a fairytale. We've grown as writers, haven't we? :P Report Review
you made me cry! this was a really good story, it was sad but very very good!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
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