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Review #1, by yoyoyoyoyo Joker and the Thief

19th May 2010:
tat was greatt! keep going!

Author's Response: Thank you! I have a little of chapter 7 and chapter 8 written, it's just writing chapter 6 that I'm struggling with.

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Review #2, by Veela Girl Under Pressure

13th May 2009:
I like it a lot but maybe a little more about Lily's opinions on the Marauders!!!

Author's Response: thank you! i'll work on adding in lily's opinions of them in future chapters.

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Review #3, by Dilys Derwent Somebody Told Me

13th May 2009:
i love it, but what i said in chapter 1 is still true. you need to develop the scenes more and in different ways, and sometimes the dialogue is a little unbelievable. and i don't think you need the character thingys at the beginning because most of it comes across during the story. otherwise really good and i can't wait for the next chapter. keep writing!
Dilys :)

Author's Response: once again thanks for your response! i have a good chunk of the next chapter written so hopefully i'll have it finished soon. i'll try and work on developing the scenes.

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Review #4, by Dilys Derwent Under Pressure

13th May 2009:
i can't see why you have no reviews for this. it is really quite good. your writings great, but i think you need to develop the scenes a little. however it only the first chapter so...
Dilys :)

Author's Response: thanks! after re-reading the first chapter i realized how short it was so i've been trying to make all of the chapters longer and filled with more information than that one.

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