Watch the spelling please!Author's Response: My apologies D: Report Review
There was a bit of common language that annoyed me in this chapter too but I'll leave it alone, since it's not my story.
You made good use of this chapter for character development.
I want to know what's coming next!
RosieAuthor's Response: I feel bad now... I might not be updating this is a while... I'm sorry. Busy Junior life is killing me. Report Review
Good chapter, nice to see a scene with all the Potter/Weasley's + Teddy and Andromeda in it. Was it a bit of a filler chapter? That's how it felt to me.
Just out of interest, where are you intending to go with this story?
Looking forward to reading the next chapter (which I shall do right now!)
RosieAuthor's Response: It was kind of a filler chapter AND a chapter for meeting the kids in my story... get ages and stuff. Report Review
Yay, very good chapter! A lot meatier than the last two, a bit more action, lol.
Very interested to know what is going on with Harry and Draco... perhaps we shall find out as the story unfolds?
One grammar mistake I picked up "he could head the Potters'." perhaps that was meant to be "and he could head off to the Potter's."?
"eleven oh four" was probably not the correct way to phrase the time either.
Also a bit of common language that annoyed me like crew, and the use of mom rather than mum in a U.K. based story but that's just me being nit-picky so feel free to ignore those.
Actually feel free to ignore all my criticisms!
Sorry if I'm being negative...
I really did love this chapter though. :)
I'm off to work now so I'll have to continue reading when I get back.
RosieAuthor's Response: Actually since I'm talking about it being owned by multiple Potters it would be typed "Potters' " but thanks for making me think about that ^__^
I know I have some grammar mistakes... not everything is caught...even after proof reading something 10 times.
I'm glad you liked it! ^__^ Report Review
Okay, well I had a little trouble understanding where all of the letters fit in with the dialogue but I got there in the end.
Another good chapter. Great to see a more human side to Draco.
I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter!
RosieAuthor's Response: The letter was going to be in later chapters. I might not be updating any time soon to be honest... I'm just too busy with school to come up with the next idea for this story D:
I like human-Draco fics so I had to add one to the world Report Review
Good first chapter!
Not a huge fan of nicknames for Scorpius but I suppose you haven't got much choice really, it's either Scor or Scorpy, or Pius? and I much prefer Scor out of the three!
I want to find out more about Draco! Has he changed much?
I suppose I will find out soon, on to the next chapter!
P.S. I can't believe I'm the first person to review this!Author's Response: I personally think the idea of Rosie and Scorpius calling each other "Rosie and Scorpie" makes me giggle.. that's why I put that in my fanfiction. And Pius makes me scared. I'd cry if someone called me that D: Report Review
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