Hey there!

I think this was incredibly adorable. It was fluffy, but it wasn't overly so, which was nice. Because as much as I love Ron and Hermione, I can't see them being entirely fluffy. At least, not most of the time.

The ending was rather unique, and I liked it. It shows how life along with relationships really are. They're not always perfect, sometimes there's bumps along the way, but you can still manage to be filled with happiness enough to treasure the moments that are perfect.

This was beautiful!

I liked your characterizations. I do think they were spot on. I especially love teary eyed Harry and a Ginny that is reproving of this fact, that is so her. Or Hermione twisting Ron's words at the beginning of the story when she's slamming about pots and pans.

However, there was really no transition from that point to their wedding day. If I had any criticism, it would be that you should have a bit more of a lead in to that. It doesn't make sense for them to be arguing one moment and the next, getting married. I realize that this is a one-shot, but that doesn't mean that it's not workable. :)

Another criticism of mine, is that this isn't too descriptive. Of course, I think that's a preference of mine - some people prefer to be terse. But, I think I would prefer more detail. This seems like a mostly dialogue driven piece.

Over all, however, this is quite lovely!

Nice work!

♥
Linders

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Great story line; keep going with it! Can't wait to read more.

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It was sweet in the middle when Harry got choked up - that fact choked me up a bit. Gosh, Hermione is tiresome. Not, really, but I wish she'd have a little more patience. I think that it was sweet that they were having a couple fight at their best friends/relative's home. It is really something I can see them doing. It is such a lovely sort of simple story.
I love that cupcakes really are rather romantic.
Cheers.

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LOL...yay for cupcakes! It was cute. And Ron and Hermione have to be the cutest couple.

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Uuuh! This fiction is really, really nice! Luv it!
The end is so sweet!!!
10/10

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Very sweet and cute. Well done with a good ending.

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Aw the ending was amazing. It was a wicked story. I hate that Hermione got mad over a cake but it seems like what she'd do...sorta.

Great job.

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that is so cool and funny

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This was hilarious!

The cupcake was so cute!

Nicely writen

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