Just a quick question before I review: Is this story still temporarily abandoned or have you decided to keep writing?
I like the idea and perspective that you have taken on this story and you have certainly been able to pull it off. The only thing that I would suggest is the indentations that you put for your dialogue, it tends to put me off (and this could just be me) as it seems a little all over the place but at the same time you use both description and dialogue fantastically well.
Anonymous Writer. Report Review
An strong start--looking forward to the next chapter. Hope you update soon.Author's Response: I will have the next chapter up soon, I hope, I was further along in this story than I am in my others. It could be a little while though, my exams are only just finishing next week. Thank you so much for reviewing, I'm glad you like it.
xx ~ lily Report Review
Terms of Service
categories & genres
short story collection