Reading Reviews for A Troublesome Sixth Year
  
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Review #1, by Emerald_Eyed_Bookworm The Beginning

4th January 2012:
Great plot line, and good writing. My only issue with it was your telling, rather than showing in your descriptions. What I mean by that it's better to show what people look like, act like, rather than pausing to describe every detail of your characters. (i.e. instead of saying Tonks keeps her hair pink, insert something like "Her usual bubble gum curls burned a fiery red as her violet eyes glared at the boy across from her." )

Hope that helps some. Can't wait to see where you take your story.

-Em

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