Oh my goodness. This was progressing nicely, when all of a sudden... What a finish.
Your piece is well written, perfect spelling and grammar as far as I can see, good pace, nice characterisation of Teddy, plotline is moving along well, too early for any major points, all in all a satisfying chapter. Then your ending, the hook that catches your readers. It definitely means I will be watching for your next posting.
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That was some ending! I cannot wait to read on!! please update ASAP!
Just two things that I did notice is, why would Teddy call Ginny Miss Potter?? she would be more of a second-mother to him by now and he would call her by her first name, and I think it said somewhere in the books that he looked like one of his parents, I just can't remember which one.
But I really liked this chapter, hope you keep writing it and im going to add it into my favourites! =] so i can keep up-to-dateAuthor's Response: You're right about the Mrs. Potter thing, I'll change that.
I didn't know the books mentioned him looking like his parents. I guess that means the story varies from canon a bit (which it does anyway since I think the books mentioned that Ted didn't inherit Remus's condition)
So anyways thanks for the review, and I'll get the next chapter up as soon as possible. Report Review
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