6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by MollyisBoss You Can't Stop The Clock Ticking

23rd February 2009:
I really liked this story. I'm a total MollyArthur shipper, I would really love to read more. It'd be awesome to see how Molly copes...I'm actually starting one of those types of stories. Anyways, Good job. P.s: how in the heck do you get a banner? I made one on the paint thing and now I have no idea how to get it off of there. Anyway, again, great job and think about continuing.

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Review #2, by long_live_luna_bellatrix You Can't Stop The Clock Ticking

9th February 2009:
Wow, I totally wasn't expecting that ending! It was very well written, and the characters were amazing. I liked the twist at the end, and the clock hand falling off. It was a great story idea! Mrs. Weasley, especially, was written fantastically!!! Well done!!!

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Review #3, by shadowkitty22 You Can't Stop The Clock Ticking

10th October 2008:
Well that was an interesting take on the incident from the Weasley's point of view. I guess it actually kind of goes along with JKR's original idea of having Arthur die in OOTP instead of Sirius.

I did find a few typos and punctuation errors in your story. Most of the punctuation errors involved having both a comma and period in between the quotation marks when someone was speaking. You only need the comma. As for the typos, here's the ones that I found and I've put the corrections in italics.

Ever since Harry Potter had brought back Cedric Diggory’s body,

Molly screamed and shrieked in the elevator, as if making noise would make it go faster. (I got rid of the extra word in that sentence)

She saw two rather big piercing holes in the skin.

Molly buried her head in her hands, trying to soothe the throbbing pain in her head.

Hope this helps.

Emilie
=^_^=

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Review #4, by crazy4fred2 You Can't Stop The Clock Ticking

8th June 2008:
Hello! Here are my notes about your story:

For some of your dialouge you use two punctuation marks, like "I'm fine,."

You have excellent descriptions, and that made the story more realistic.

I enjoyed the characterizations, but to me when she sees Arthur lying there injured she would be in hysterics. Remember the boggart in OOTP?

Besides that, this was a well written one-shot. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Hey! That's an error on my part, I will go back and change that one day, but I only noticed it when I submitted it for validation. I see what you mean about Molly, maybe she would be in hysterics, maybe she's passed hysterics. Thanks for the review! You're thoughts and comments are really helpful and much appreciated =)


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Review #5, by Buttonlady You Can't Stop The Clock Ticking

31st May 2008:
arthur can't die. not yet

Author's Response: Sorry, but that's the way it planned out =( Thanks for the review! =)

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Review #6, by twixie You Can't Stop The Clock Ticking

31st May 2008:
NOOO!! OMG--I absolutely love Arthur and Molly! Please say they're wrong. I did like your story.

Author's Response: Hey! I know, it's sad. No, it's not wrong... I don't think. Thanks for your review! =)

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