I didn't really find it that interesting and I don't really get it. Report Review
Hi there. Wow, this is a really long chapter! It's really good though. The first bit, with Snape and Mundungus, I think could have been cut a bit maybe, but apart from that everything was well in place. I could really feel the emotion when Pentunia was looking at Harry at Privet drive and thinking of Lily. That bit was really sad. It was really well written, though I think you could have possibly split it into two chapters? Anyhow, it worked well just the same and the length didn't really bother me at all. Ha ha, It's just that some readers are put off by length. Your descriptions lacked just a little, so maybe that's something you could work on? Apart from that the characterisation was great and emotion almost flawless. Ha ha, this was a really good start! Keep it up :D Rose Report Review
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