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Review #1, by queen_luna Let Me Go

20th October 2008:
Wow, I loved the raw emotions in this one-shot. I think you did a great job of portraying how Draco and Hermione felt inside. I also liked your take on their marriage, the what-would-have-been if they had gotten married. I haven't read too many fanfics where Draco turned Hermione into a subservient wife like Lucius does to Narcissa in other fanfics. I think you wrote it very well. I think it could be expanded though. Nicely done.

Author's Response: I really appreciate the compliments, thank you! I knew when I wrote this that it was a risk, because of the slight OOC in Hermione but I'm so glad you think I pulled it off. You are not the first to say it should be expanded. I have considered it but frankly, I'm concerned it will lose the mysterious nature of the plot.then again it could work..thank you for your lovely review.

Nikki


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Review #2, by lia_2390 Let Me Go

18th October 2008:
Hey Nikki!

This is a different side to Hermione here; I've never thought she was the type to submit to someone, like what she did to Draco during their marriage. I think you've written their feelings very well; I really like your use of metaphors and descriptions :)

"...I was screaming under my breath for so long. You never allowed me to scream out loud." - this line was awesome.

You've put a new spin on a Dramione fic, it's all angsty (if that's a word) and dramatic, I love it, it made for an interesting plot. You've made Draco more mature in that he's man enough to let her go and to even admit that he should've let her marry someone else, even if it was someone he despised since he was 11.

I also love the fact that they're minds are telling them to leave but their actions tell a different story and in the end, Draco lets Hermione leave because it's for the best...he won't hurt her anymore. It's kinda cool that it all happened in the rain...that's a classic xD, there's always something about the rain, isn't there?

I just noticed a couple typos but nothing major - "bare" at the end should be "bear" and "Weasely" should be "Weasley".

Nice story you have here:)
Lia.

Author's Response: Oops. Thanks for catching those typos Lia, I seriously always miss something LOL.

The line "...screaming under my breath." actually came from a Snow Patrol song, I just added the embellishments. It is an amazing line though, I agree.

I'm so, so happy right now because you read between the lines of this story. That's exactly how I wanted it to go although some people don't catch it. Then again, sometimes I don't make it obvious enough. I was afraid the rain would be cliche but it actually is a sort of symbolism, like it's washing away the past so they can move on.

Thank you very much for the wonderful review and for pointing out those mistakes. I'm going to fix those ASAP. ;)

Nikki


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Review #3, by frostedteardrops Let Me Go

10th October 2008:
Aww, is this only a one-shot? That's too bad, there's a lot of potential here. Very interesting, enough of the backstory revealed to bait readers but not too much to rid the mystery.

Your opening lines, "Her feet resisted, becoming bitter enemies with every step. The frozen breeze assaulted her teary eyes" were absolutely beautiful. Such wonderful diction used here, bitter enemies, the breeze assaulting... great imagery.

Wonderful one-shot!

Author's Response: There was a review, before the crash, that actually said the same thing you did. I've considered branching off and making this more but I think I'm scared I'll butcher it!

Thank you so much for your kind words. I'm slightly proud of this one so reading your lovely comments backs me up a bit LOL. Thank you again, for reading and reviewing, it means a lot.

Nikki


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Review #4, by granpa harry Let Me Go

4th June 2008:
good story. I enjoyed the emotional force you put into the story.

Author's Response: Humbly I say, thank you! Glad you liked it.

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Review #5, by emocut_or_blackrox Let Me Go

31st May 2008:
wow.(dot dot dot)
amazing
why dont you
continue the story
i hate one shots
pleaze
it was really good?

Author's Response: wow, amazing? Omgosh I am shocked! Thank you so much for the kind words, they've made my day a little brighter, especially since I've been suffering from some writer block. The thought of writing more past the end doesn't seem right; however, I've considered writing about what happened up to that point. Maybe! Thank you again for the wonderful review.

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Review #6, by Weasleys Forever Let Me Go

31st May 2008:
So sad. Why did she walk away? They realised their problems, so now they should work to fix things.

Well written.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, and the compliment. You're right, there was some tiny bit of resolution between them, but at the same time they have switched roles. Draco bared his soul too late. SOmewhere deep inside him he knew Hermione was going to leave anyway. She had been supressed for so long and being the obedient, loving wife wasn't enough for her anymore. I guess in a way they put all their flaws out into the open so her leaving didn't turn into hatred or resentment. I'm glad you liked it!

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