I really liked this. I liked the simplicity of it, yet it spoke volumes. A great subject to tackle, and I loved how you were able to portray the raw human emotion of loss. This really touched me, and you did a wonderful job writing it. Major props to you.
Your use of language was magnificent, and I love how you made this into a first person. It definitely made it more personable and relateable.
Just wonderful.Author's Response: Aw, you have no idea how much your review meant to me. Thank you so much! Report Review
One thing - Harry Potter is set in the UK, and there they don't say "mom"; it's mum just in case you didn't know. Sorry, I'm just always really irk-y about it.
Other than that, it was amazing. Really beautiful :)Author's Response: Ah! I knew that too, I call my own mom 'mum'. I guess I just didn't put that in writing...=)
Thanks though! Report Review
I hate you right now! And I hate pms! I'm crying and that's all because of you! Hahaha.. :)
I really, really, really, really liked this very very very very much! It was great.. Your desribtions where great and the flow and plot amazing! So well-written and good.. I've always imagined Teddy as a blue-haired guy.. Hahaha.. :) But I think that him looking like Remus works too.. :) It's amazing! :D
Great story.. I'm sorry I can't be to more help that that, because I really like what you've written! :) it's great! :D
PingoAuthor's Response: Awww, thanks so much. Sorry you have pms, I know what that's like. I actually wrote this during pms...=) Thanks so much for all the nice comments!! Report Review
This is lovely. You have written Teddy as a fine young man. Tonks and Remus would be proud of him. I always feel so sad about Teddy, having such wonderful parents who died so soon after his birth. I always have the thought that they had a choice whether or not to fight, whether or not to risk death. How could Teddy not resent the choice they made. But in your piece, he understands why they did fight, and in a way that gives a lot of closure.
Your piece is lovely, well written and Teddy shines through. Well done and keep writing.Author's Response: Thank you so much. This was an extremely hard piece to write, as Tonks and Remus were my favorite characters. I was literally crying the entire time. But, thank you so much for all the kind words. I really appreciate it. Report Review
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