Heya for Green! A wonderful person..

Well now for the story.. Finally I got to it.. Sorry, I've been putting things before it too many times and I love it so much.. And I hate it! Huh? I don't make any sense..

Well, I hated the ending.. I was just about to be happy that they would get married, but then he just have to die? And did you have to make it such and open ending??? Lilje, I hate you right now.. (you know that won't be that way for more than a couple of seconds after I read I story where the ending didn't go according to my plan, right?)

Oh well the story is good, I'd have to give you that, and not very clichee.. Okay I actually really really like it! :) You write so good.. I'm just fordybet in it everytime I read it.. Just like right now when I'm reading Pride and Predijuice.. Though you're no way like Jane Austin, sorry honey, but no she's much better! HAHAHA.. :)

I'm rambling again aren't I? Hehe.. :) I know you love it..

Well I've got to go now.. I have a lot of things to do..
I hope I'll see you soon! Hehe. :) Forhåbentlig i Ringsted i sommerferien? (Har Mia overhovedet indviet dig i den plan, det kunne lige ligne hende ikek at gøre det.. HAHAHA).. :D

Vi snakkes min søde lilje! :)

Bye,
Pingvinus aka the Devil of er.. Okay just Pingvinus

Author's Response: Well this was written for a 'Sad Bride' challenge so it really would make no sense if it had a happy endning;)

Glad you kind of liked it anyway.

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Pingvinus.

Yours,
Lilje

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I think this is very interesting. I don't think I've ever read a Lily/OC. It's sad that they don't have the chance to be together and that it ends with a REAL car crash unlike the one the Dursleys made up for Harry.

Author's Response: I'm glad you seem to like it.
Thank you for reading and reviewing.

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Hey, onestop_hpfan18 from the forums here to fill your request for a review. Firstly, I really enjoyed this. It was very nicely written and sweet, while sad at the end. Which, the end actually caught me off guard because the way you wrote this, it made it seem as though there was going to be a fluffy, happy ending; that only makes me like it even more as a tragic ending can bring a story to a beautiful close, which it did here. I didn't catch any grammar/spelling errors, so great job there as well. Overall, it flowed smoothly and was nicely written all together. Great job.

Author's Response: That was my evil master plan; to make it seem like everything was just perfect and then spoil it all at the end.
Glad I avoided the grammar errors here.
Thank you for the review, it's very much appreciated:)

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Wow, I really didn't see that coming. The story was moving along so nicely, gently, romantically and then just pop, illusions disappears. Which, really, was pretty well done, since it all ended in my head just like a dream ends, when you wake up and are dazed and then there's the hole inside of you, because you know it was just a dream that has no place in the real world. Great job, because you managed to convey that through words extremely well.

You asked about flow and emotions. The flow was okay. I liked the random additions of the sky, flowers, the mirror and Lily's own thoughts as she walked down the aisle. As for the emotions, a very good job as well. You didn't overdo it and they were nicely worded and phrased, dream-like, which in the end proved to be quite literal. :)

The only thing I would point out, not that it is a negative, is that this story doesn't at all seems like it was about Lily. It would go well as a stand-alone, original one-shot, or for any other female character. I was missing a characteristic, or something that would make think, yes, this is Lily Potter, Harry's daughter. i know we know nothing of her, meeting her in the short prologue, but then it was up to you to give her some depth and show the traits. But except this little tiny thing, this was fantastic and the ending made me go all 'no' and sad, so...:) 9/10!

xoxo Liz

Author's Response: That was exactly what I was aiming fore; for peopleto think that everything is perfect and then at the end simply burst that bubble and show that nothing was really okay.

I love the fact that your review mentions nothing about grammar! That's usually my biggest problem...

I am aware that Lily has no characteristics that shows she's really Lily and not some random person, but it was the point here that it could have been anyone - it just wasn't. But I definitely see your point.

Thank you very much for the review, it's appreciated:)

/D i a

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Wow, that was beautiful! It was well written and I think you did a marvelous job with the challenge.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad to hear that.

I'm asuming you think it follows your rules and qualifies for the challenge then:)

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Wow, that was unexpected! It was well written and very sad. Well done.

Author's Response: Thank you!

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You are just THE sweetest person ever! You didn't need to dedikate this fic for me. But thank you for it :)
I think the story is brilliant, and really beautiful. Well written!

Author's Response: You're welcome, I just thought you deserved it...

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