That was an AMAZING story. They both stayed in character very well (I have trouble with that, myself. Who am I kidding, Hermione and Draco are WAY OOC in all my stories. lol)), and yet they still managed to have interaction in which neither of them died. A wonderful story! Report Review
are you sure this is your first ff?
I liked it a lot
bravoAuthor's Response: Yea, 'tis my first, LOL. thx for the review. Glad you liked it. Report Review
Oh, boy. You write so well. This piece is amazing. Their emotions are realistic. They hate each other and that does not change overnight. (Unfortunately most writing Dramione think it does, or even worse emotions seesaw rapidly and violently between hate and love.)
Your use of language is breathtaking. They are both articulate intelligent people in canon so their argument is believable. They score points off each other with great pleasure.
Hermione slapping him reminds me of a Chinese (I think) proverb, "The first person to raise a fist is the first person to run out of words". Perhaps Draco did win the argument after all, and his final response seals that victory.
After your initial author's note I read very critically and the only things I spotted were "anti-thesis" should be "antithesis" and a misplaced * in the third-last paragraph.
This is a wonderful piece of expremely professional writing. Congratulations and keep writing.Author's Response: Wow, thanks a bunch for your review. I also hate it when they fall for each other immediately, it's infuriating. LOL. thx for reading. Report Review
I thought it was really good. It wasn't all sappy and they didn't come to some miraculous ''understanding'' but for one moment they shared something. It was very good!Author's Response: Aww, thanks. Yeah, I'm not a fan of sudden declarations of love and such. I'm a realist, LOL.
thx for your review, *gives out cookies* Report Review
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