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Review #1, by SpringTime Chapter One- Our Own World

18th November 2008:
I think you have a really nice story that you could do here. I noticed that you haven't updated in a while though. I will recomend getting a beta, there were a lot of grammatical errors and you switched POV from first person, to third to Hermione. Just thought I would point that out. Once you work out the technical stuff though, plotwise you are looking pretty good, even though it is only the first chapter.
I hope that this helped and you post again soon :) Thanks for requesting me :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I appreciate your advice and am planning to get a Beta. It's been awhile since I've posted but I plan on working on all of my stories! I'm really happy you liked this story.

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Review #2, by shadowycorner Chapter One- Our Own World

24th May 2008:
There was a wonderful display of relationships in this chapter. I liked the interaction between Ron and Hermione, just as when Harry spoke about Ginny. The characters were all good, except for when Ron went on spilling his heart out to Harry that he loves Hermione...I would've thought it'd be more subtle. Ron and Harry were best friends, but they enver spoke to each other about their feelings too much, at least not so openly. Also, it's a good idea to get a beta, because there were a lot of typos, commas missing and random places where the sentence could flow smoother. Other than that, an enjoyable read. :)

Happy writing and keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you for your honesty. It was a little out of character for Ron but they are going through a difficult time so aren't acting completely like themselves. Well that is what I wanted it to feel like.

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Review #3, by onestop_hpfan18 Chapter One- Our Own World

21st May 2008:
Hey, onestop_hpfan18 from the forums here to fill your request for a review.

Great first chapter. All the characters seem in-character and that's great. I didn't see much grammar/spelling errors. Though I noticed that you spelled 'you' as just the letter 'u'. It was a little further than the halfway point of the chapter.

And then I noticed a grammar mistake that you made with what perspective you're using. It's this one here-- '...Ron had opened up to Harry about my concerns about us.' You wrote in first person in the itailized, which is fine, but then you start writing in third person after the itailized part. It's this part righ there as it seems to be in first person instead of what the rest is written in.

Here it is-- '...Ron had opened up to Harry about my concerns about us.' It would flow and sound better if it were like this, '...Ron had opened up to Harry about his concerns with Hermione and him.' Other than that I didn't see anything esle that needed fixing.

Overall, great flow of the chapter, characterization of keep the characters in-character, and nicely written. Keep it up.

Author's Response: Thanks for the great review. Thank you for pointing out all the mistakes, it will make it easier for me to edit it and I plan on getting a Beta for it.

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