This was beautiful. Every time I listen to that song I think of Severus and Lily, it fits them so perfectly. Poor Severus, he has such a rotten life, I cannot even imagine how I could survive in his shoes.
I liked how you made James' middle name Charlus, someone's done their homework, after Charlus Potter who married Dorea Black and had one son. Veeery clever :)
This was an amazing story. I'm really glad I read it!Author's Response: awh thank you.
I used to have an obsession with harry potter wiki and noticed it on there hahaaa
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it was cute!
nice readAuthor's Response: thank you x Report Review
Not too shabby. I enjoy fics like this so I hope you continue to write more:)Author's Response: Thank you x Report Review
Aww, I love it! Kinda brought tear to my eyes and that sad face look you get.
Loved it! xxAuthor's Response: Thank you x Report Review
I liked your story. The emotion was very intense. This was definitely a good story! 10/10 You can see how much Snape loved Lily and I even felt sorry for him even though I would rather see Lily with James better.Author's Response: Thank you! xxx Report Review
Great Job! I am Alassie, and I saw you recently favorited my story, The Lovely Life of Lily Potter, and so I came to leave a review. This was so good! You should be proud of youself. Excellent job, a little rough around the edges, but really, what fan fic is perfect? None of them.
10/10Author's Response: Thank you. x. I really like your stories :) Report Review
aww, the last bit was awesomeAuthor's Response: Thank you x Report Review
hi its good although i actually hate this song lol its sweet and sad
one of the lines you got wrong though you said "i wont lose no sleep on that", it actually says "i wont lose out on sleep at night" but it doesnt matter that muchAuthor's Response: Thank you x
i will have to check out the site where i get my lyrics from Report Review
you did a pretty great job, hon. I feel bad for Snape =( watching someone else marry the one person you're in love with is kinda too much too bear... 10/10Author's Response: Thank you x Report Review
It is good that you said you changed the song to fit the story. next time, try to use quotes when there is someone talking.Author's Response: Thanks
And for the advice x Report Review
this is good, I like story's in Snape's pov' with James and Lily paring.
10/10Author's Response: Thank you. I like them too x Report Review
uhhh...this is good, but i reckon u should can the lyrics nd just do the story, but still goodAuthor's Response: Thanks :) Report Review
Aww! That was so sweet! I usually dont like Snape/Lily ones but this one was really good! 10/10!Author's Response: Thank Youuu x :) Report Review
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