You have the beginnings of what sounds like a good story here. Though you do need to go back over your first three chapters and correct a few spelling mistakes and be more discriptive about who the three people are and also about places that they visit. If you go through your chapters and make corrections and resubmit you might get more reviews. It also reminds people that your still here. I give you a final score of 9/10 and add you to favs so that if you do decide to update I'll know about it.

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Again not a bad chapter. There are one or two typos you need to correct and you have Draco saying "would you like to join me at Hogwarts" I think you meant Hogsmead. Another 8/10.

Author's Response: Thanks would have to go and correct it :o)

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Not a bad start. You have me intrigued as to what the purpose of the six newcomers visit is. So 8/10 and onto the next chapter.

Author's Response: thanks :o)

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lol. I liked whT MELODY SAID. YOU SHOULD HAVE HAD DRACO'S reaction though.

Author's Response: Thanks and I try and squeeze it in there thanks for pointing it out though.

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this is kinda interesting! i wanna know more!
its kinda like twilight-ish. :D
oh and if you still want a banner email me at twimoon_eat_world@yahoo.com

Author's Response: Thank you I'll be posting another chapter up soon.And about the banner part I will proably need after the third chapter ok and thanks again for the review.

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