Ah what an ending! Short but sweet :D
Even though it could have been longer, I think this is the best chapter. The choice that Narcissa must make is portrayed beautifully...it must have been a difficult decision for her to make. I really liked the first and last sentences...it added a uniformity to the chapter to begin and end with the Dark Lord having fallen (though of course he hadn't completely fallen at the start)
Overall I thought this was a great story and I'm shocked that it hasn't got very many reviews. Thanks for writing 8/10 :DAuthor's Response: Thanks for all your great reviews! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Your feedback is very helpful and appreciated. :-) Report Review
Again, good chapter.
Its great to read the events of the HP books, such as Draco's mission, through Narcissa's eyes. It adds a new and interesting perspective to the story. I would have liked to have seen some more dialogue in this chapter, though. It read a little like an essay rather than a story.
I was a little confused over this line: 'I rarely killed myself'. I think its supposed to mean that Narcissa rarely killed other people, but it also could mean that she rarely committed suicide, which doesn't make a whole lot of sense lol! Other than that your grammar is flawless.
I also like that you've made Narcissa and Lucius' relationship a happy one, despite Narcissa's initial worries. I always considered them to be a happy couple and don't really like it when they're portrayed otherwise. But that's just me! :D
On to the next chapter...8/10! :D Report Review
I liked this very much.
You write first person really well...Narcissa has a very strong voice. I'm not usually a fan of the 'introductory chapter' in which the character lists everything about their life but I did enjoy this. I especially liked the way you included snippets of dialogue within paragraphs. It felt so much more real...as though Narcissa is actually reminiscing about past conversations.
8/10 and on to the next chapter :D Report Review
FANTASTIC! I think you wrote the thoughts and feelings of Narcissa so well, it was just amazing!
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