I love it!Its great! :)Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad you like it! Report Review
Hmmm... interesting :)
I liked it. Although I think it was a tad short, I thought it was a great way to start off a story. I think that it is always best to start with some mystery and danger. I only found a couple of spots where there should be a comma but other than that I didn't find any spelling mistakes. Your descriptions are very articulate and I think that this could really develop into something wonderful!
Keep up the good work,
GryffindorGirl007Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! You don't waste any time! :) I only requested yesterday methinks! :D
I know it's short, and I think I'll edit it to make it longer once I've finished the story! I'm glad you thought it was a good opening chapter, I was quite worried it was too ... uneventful. I will try and edit the mistakes out. :)
Thanks so much! Report Review
Well written. A good first chapter with lots of tease to draw your readers in.
I am looking forward to chapter 2. Keep writing.Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! And I will definitely keep writing! :) Thanks for the review! Report Review
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