I really like it so far =]
Loved -“Who in the name of Merlin’s baggy ball-sack is Sherlock?”
Really funny line, cant wait for the rest.Author's Response: Glad you liked :D Thanks! Report Review
good work, i really like these sorts of stories, and i can see this one is definately going to be one of the good ones. good work. i especially love the relationship between James and Lily and between the marauders. there's definately the love/hate with LJ and the Marauders are definately really good friends. but PETER IS AWESOME in this fic. a mean feat. no one really does that. so awesome work. i love some of his lines in this.
keep this up and i'll keep reading and reviewing.
SFAuthor's Response: I'm so glad you like it! :)
I couldn't leave Peter out - I hate it when people do that. If we know he was a Marauder, they should try to stay canon-esque! That's my aim!
Hopefully I'll have the next chapter up soon enough, but I seem to be struggling a bit! :)
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Oh you are actually so funny. Even when I am sick and tired and lying in bed miserable you can still manage to make me laugh. Even the disclaimer was funny. Well I thought it was, at any rate.
Sirius talking about silky hair. that is so lol-worthy.
But I would have liked a bit more of a description of Jessica. In my mind, I can see her from the back, but the front of her and her face are sort of non-existent. But I guess more of her will come out when Sirius gets to know her a bit more, especially personality wise. I could of done with a bit more of her in this chapter is what I'm saying. But I'm just greedy sometimes.
I'd also really like to see James eat his words non figuratively. Is that possible? Well it would make for some good reading. I hope the next chapter comes up soon, I am dying to read it.Author's Response: Yay! I always worry about putting stories under "humour" just in case I'm actually not funny ... Oh, and get better! :)
Jessica will definitely develop as a character, and hopefully her description will improve as the story continues! I'm aiming to have her fully entered in the story by chapter 5/6...
Seeing him eat his own words will definitely be entertaining - but I'm not quite sure how to do it yet ... it'll come in time! :)
I'm hopefully going to have the chapter up by tomorrow - keep your eyes peeled! :)
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okay please tell me you are planning to keepup with this story
ill be waiting
L.E.BAuthor's Response: I most definitely will! :) Report Review
Hey Cedrics Gurl
I really enjoyed this! Some of the lines in it were just absolutely hilarious. I hope that you write another chapter soon, I'd definitely read on.
With the name, I don't really have any suggestions. I'm really unimaginative, sorry. But I think it could be something that perhaps describes what the story is going to be about a bit more. Or something really exciting that is going to make people want to find out more about it. Uhh that probably wasn't very helpful. But I think 'A Marauder in the Making' makes it sound a lot like heaps of other stories. Maybe you could think of something that makes it stand out from all the others.
I thought your description of the James/Lily rights was wonderful! I laughed almost all the way through this, especially at Peter.
So thank you for writing something for my challenge, and I really hope you continue this for I really enjoyed it!!
--NellieAuthor's Response: Hey!
I'm so glad you liked it! And I will definitely write on - I aim to have chapter two up by the end of the week/next week.
I'm considering changing the name, as, at first, I was going to have Lily or my OC as the Marauder in the making - but now I have a main plot. I'll post on the help section on the forums for ideas! :)
I love Peter. I have it when people leave him out of their stories - it's so uncanon. I thought that Peter needed to have a trademark quality - and so I based him on my sister. Here's to hoping she wont turn out to be a murderer! :)
I'm glad you found this funny, and want to read on! Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
Brilliant start! i absolutely love how the marauders interact, it's hilarious! I can't wait to see what happens next! keep up the great writing!Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm really glad you like it! As for the Marauders, pure legends! And I'm so happy you think I've got them right! BOOYAH! :P Report Review
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