SilverShadow04 here from the forums!
Wow, for someone who has never written a founder's era this story was amazing. From the wonderful scenery description in the beginning all the way down to that final line. I love this story and the fact that you came up with this from just getting a character and a room is very impressive. I will most definitely have to check out your other stories.
The only thing that needs fixing is this typo:
and what are heart says are very
other then that fantastic job!Author's Response: I was worried about this one shot as I've never even read a founders fic to know how people generally percive the characters.
the story itself came to me easily, it was the characterisation that I sturggled with, so I'm really pleased you thought I did a good job!
Thanks for pointing out the mistake, I'll go back and edit it.
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Well done, very insightful and thoughtful. Thanks.Author's Response: Thank you very much. I had some difficutly writing this, so I'm really glad you liked it! Report Review
I really love this story- especially the characterisation RowenaAuthor's Response: Thanks very much, I'm quite pleased u mentioned the characterisation as I wasn't sure how to go about her as we don't know much about her.
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wow, really love the ending. i love how she knew she was going to die, and really welcomed it. it seems like a Rowena thing to do to die on her own terms. even though we have no canon for her character, she always seemed to be strong and independentAuthor's Response: It was quite difficult to write Rowena, although not having anything to go on can be good and give u a lot of free rein it was difficult to know what to write at the same time lol.
I'm glad you enjoyed it, I never write Founders so it was a first and last for me lol. Report Review
I was not quite sure where you were going wiht the "Last Heart Beat" title until the end. It ties in with the story perfectly now and I love what Rowena was imagining as a headline in the newspaper the next day.
You managed to portray Rowena very well. Of course, we do not know much about her because she does not appear in canon very often, but the Rowena that you wrote is very similar to the one that I pictured. Her being so comfortable in the library and going there when she had nowhere else to turn seemed to fit her character perfectly.
Her heart being broken after being abandoned twice was completely undestandable and I thought that you managed to show it very well. I could not tell that this was your first Founders-era fic by the quality of your writing. Fabulous job. =) 10/10Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it, this was quite difficult to write as I know next to nothing about Rowena.
Thanks for all of your positive comments! Report Review
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