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Review #1, by ms simone Susan's Gain Loses

8th January 2012:
love susan & neville's scene! love strong women's character in hp fic!!

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Review #2, by ms simone Well, Welcome Home

8th January 2012:
love the action at end!!!

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Review #3, by lunajane elisabeth Dinner at Headquarters

10th October 2009:
Write more! Buy from draco of Luna's perspective.! It's a really good story so far!

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Review #4, by thefunnynamedperson2134 Dinner at Headquarters

1st June 2009:

and loved this chappie btw!! Your very talented writer :) MUAH!!! :*

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Review #5, by thefunnynamedperson2134 Susan's Gain Loses

7th April 2009:
hahahah good job yet again, missa. i likey :)

is it gunna be aboy or a girl?

Author's Response: no idea. maybe i'll take suggestions from my readers! =]

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Review #6, by kittikatlova Susan's Gain Loses

7th April 2009:
That was great! Thank you so much for using my suggestion! I actually like it a lot, because that allows me to see how everyone in the New Order thinks, i like it. I also thought you did an OC very well too. Susan had a lot of fight in her, and I liked that. Great job...Im excited for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Yup yup =] It's a very rough work in progress, seeing as how I'm juggling three stories right now >.< I always do this to myself...

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Review #7, by thefunnynamedperson2134 Dealing with Dung

29th March 2009:
hahahaha love it missy!!1 great job, yet again! Your errors are becoming less and less frequent too! :)

Author's Response: thank you! *bows flamboyantly* sadly, my trial of Word became deceased as of yesterday... which means no more spell-checker or grammar-checker :(

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Review #8, by kittikatlova Dealing with Dung

18th March 2009:
I liked this chapter, it was written very well. I think that either idea for Fletcher was good, servant to Grimmauld Place or Weasley's Wizard Wheezes. Great job on the length too!

Author's Response: Thank you so much :)
Length is something I've always struggled with, and it's my goal to never submit a chapter under 1,500 words, excluding the Author Notes.
I'm so glad you enjoyed this :) I'm writing as fast as I can, but alas, I am not yet a trusted author, and I must wait for through the validation queue... =D

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Review #9, by kittikatlova Well, Welcome Home

10th March 2009:
Very nice start to the story...I am excited to see where it goes. I dont think it would hurt to include a little on the other couples every now and again, if that works for you. Anyways, um, I am new to this whole actually writing for HPFF and not just reading thing, but I have always been a wonderful peer editor and if you know how we should go about it, then I would be delighted to be your beta. Just um get back with me through the review or a message (kittikatlova) and we can work this out if you would like. Good luck with the story!

Author's Response: thank you so much, but i think i've found one :)
glad you like the story!
i may start alternating who i focus on every three chapters. [since ch. 3 is waiting for validation]... that way i could give insight to the other couples.

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Review #10, by thefunnynamedperson2134 Well, Welcome Home

9th March 2009:
hahaha poor missy! I'll be ur beta!!! if you be mine! lol

loved the story so far!!

Author's Response: sure thing :)
my trial version of Word is about to expire, so soon I'll be without grammar/spell checker... but mom thinks she can snag me a free copy from a friend.
but, between the two of us, we should catch most of each other's errors.
what program do you use to type stories?

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Review #11, by thefunnynamedperson2134 A Firey Ending

2nd March 2009:
hahahaha great story...although constantly referring to the figure as "they, them, their" was kinda confusing.wouldn't you usually use "it, its, itself" to indicate it? lol just sayin...

great story so the plot line :)

yay first reviewer!!

Author's Response: thats how it started, and I know "they" is typically plural... it just reads easier than "It walked down the street, and paused under a streetlamp. It withdrew a pack of cigarettes..." "It" makes me think of a freaky creature.

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