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Review #1, by Pretense Of Perfection Footprints

9th July 2014:
hello again, I'm back to review another story!!

I do love any good fic set in the marauders era, and this was no exception. I'm typically not a big Lily/Sirius fan, but I think you did that ship a great justice with this story. The fact that you challenged yourself to write with no dialogue is aweomse, and i think the effect was awesome. I actually didn't notice that there wasn't any speaking parts, mostly because you did such a good job conveying what they were feeling for each other with description, emotion, and expression. I particularly liked the ending as well, where Lily is compared as the master of the night, and Sirius' girlfriend is the commander of the day. It captures the very essence of this kind of forbidden love and secret affair from that phrase alone, it's just beautiful. I think you did a good job of keeping them both in character as well, and I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors. The story moved along at the perfect pace, not too fast or too slow, and the plot was so intriguing, I found myself unable to stop reading.

--house cup 2014 review--
pretense of perfection, gryffindor

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Review #2, by searching17 Footprints

25th October 2008:
Aw. Sirius can't be with Lily because he got a girl pregnant already? I was kind of confused at the end with all the "she"s and everything, but I got the gist of it. :]

This part especially touched me:
Their time was up. Tears were now uncontrollable. They turned to face each other, to share one last moment together, before the light could forever scare away the dark.
It was so deep and sad and intense - I would almost feel the anxiety and fear Lily and Sirius felt.

Very good one-shot! Good emotion. 10/10.

~Estrella

Author's Response: Thanks for your review. Sorry that it was hard to understand at the end. i like how you picked out your favourite part. I like that part too. I felt drawn into it while writing it.
lollie :D


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Review #3, by sirius_luver1 Footprints

24th March 2008:
omg!
I absolutely loved that!

It was good that you didn't use dialogue otherwise you wouldn've ruined it.

i just wish this wasn't a one-shot!
100/10

Author's Response: Thanks for your review. I'm really happy that you loved it. I was so hoping that i done a good job because I haven't done something like this before. I might write more, but only if I get time, and have an idea for it.
100/10? Wow thats really high. I'm really happy that you thought i done that good a job.
Lollie :D


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Review #4, by meerkatalex Footprints

24th March 2008:
I didn't see any speech... I don't understand it.. if the man s Sirius, then who is he woman he was walking with? Was Lily the third woman?

Author's Response: Thanks for your review. the whole point of the story is that there is no speech.The man is Sirius. The woman who is with him at night is Lily, and the other woamn he got pregnat, so he has to stay with her.
Hope this helps clear things up
Lollie :D


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Review #5, by blahblahblah Footprints

23rd March 2008:
that was amazing! i am in power of the pen (writing competition) and i know what a good writer is... and you are good. just some pointers; you might want to add a little more about why they can't be together. and, a few descriptive words would be fabulous. besides that, keep on writing :)

Author's Response: Thanks for your review. I;m gklad you think I'm a good writer, i don't get that often. I will go back and edit this story once I'm at home, and have time.
Lollie :D


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Review #6, by dogsrox94 Footprints

23rd March 2008:
That was so poetic! I love it, even without words. You should maybe stick to that...you are very descriptive and can really set the mood. Great chapter! Write more things like this!

Author's Response: Thanks for your review. I'm glad you liked this story.I'll try to write more things like this, but ti is very hard not to add words.
lollie :D


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