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Review #1, by ginny4eva Discovers

5th May 2008:
I really like it so please update soon!

Author's Response: It is hard since it takes so long for the chapters to validate.

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Review #2, by LilyPotter Discovers

5th May 2008:
Wow, a couple of comments because they're not criticism. I love this story and I don't do that to good stories. One, why was Hermione going to sit on the table for breakfast? Two, people don't really talk like that in rl. I write my stories the way people talk which might actually be the problem since most people I talk to have accents so it sounds right to my ears. LOL anyway keep up the good work

Author's Response: I completely missed the "on" and I edited like 4 times. And your right people don't always talk like that BUT you are suppose to right proper so that it is understandable, think of JK's the only charater that she changes sentences for their acents are the ones who have accents that are different from the primary characters, ie: Seamus, Hagrid, Madam Maxime, Fluer. I am glad that you like it I have a few other stories that I am working on too.

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Review #3, by notenoughpotter Vistors

5th May 2008:
Interesting beginning to the story. I'm not sure if I agree that the "boys will be boys" line sounds like something Mrs. Weasley would say, but it seems to be off to a good start.

One note of constructive criticism, I think they would have done something to make sure Harry was who he said he was, not just welcomed him with open arms (literally).

Author's Response: I guess that one I forgot about a security check and two I kind of think that his reaction his Harry, you cant fake the way he feels most of the time. DE's would expect him to be kind of cocky but you are right I missed right over it.

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