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Review #1, by cassandrakillsforhim Suprise's all around

28th May 2008:
im really liking your story...but it needs more updates...good work...keep it going

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Review #2, by xduffyxgreengrassx The Hogwarts Express

26th March 2008:
Pretty Good. What Happens Next???

Author's Response: Hi thanks for the review! Ive re-written the ending of the first chapter and added a new chapter! So please read both of these and reveiw!

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Review #3, by SnowyHedwig The Hogwarts Express

25th March 2008:
I like your first chapter, especially the idea of Draco sending an owl to find Hermione as opposed to getting up and looking for her himself - that sounds just like something Malfoy would do!

On a constructive criticism note, there were a lot of spelling and grammatical errors. You kept switching from past to present tense, sometimes in the middle of a sentence. There were several names, for example, Crookshanks, where you didn't use a capital. One that I think is really important for HP writers, is that you were misspelling character's names.

Might I recommend you get a beta to help iron out these errors? hp-lexicon.org is a great website, which could help you with your canon terminology.

I really think this story has potential, and I like what you've done with it this far - it is rather difficult to read, however, with the mistakes. Ironing those out will make it a much more enjoyable read.

Update soon, I'm interested in where you're going to take this!

Author's Response: Hi thanks for the review! Ive re-written the ending of the first chapter and added a new chapter! So please read both of these and reveiw!

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Review #4, by Raineisha Weasley The Hogwarts Express

25th March 2008:
i like it i just think u could write more!!! lol but realy i want to see them hook up u no ! hahaha lol ;)

Author's Response: Hi thanks for the review! Ive re-written the ending of the first chapter and added a new chapter! So please read both of these and reveiw!

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Review #5, by slytherindracomalfoygirl The Hogwarts Express

25th March 2008:
Yay i'm the fist review!
anyway this is a really good start. I like the letter that Draco sends Hermione on the train. I have a question though. In the letter that Hermione got from Dumbledore does it tell her where the Head common room is? I like how you put in the part where Draco says Well as we are gonna see each other 24/7, i thought maybe we could be civil'. That is great. I don't hear that that often from Draco I hear that mostly from Hermione but she usually yells it at him or says it sternly. Anyway again Great start!
Update soon!
10/10

Author's Response: Hi thanks for the review! Ive re-written the ending of the first chapter and added a new chapter! So please read both of these and reveiw!

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